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by Jelp

person Allys
schedule October 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was really sweet and funny XD. Both boys were adorably glompable. But I'm gonna pull a Sasuke and ask - "Where's the next part? Where’s the porn?" XD LOLZ *Loves on you*. Seriously though this was really funny, I love how you softly mocked the genre and the idea of Naruto continuing on in Jiraiya's footsteps is surprisingly one that I've never seen before. It's an awesome concept, very witty in how the boys got together *hugs u*. I'm sure Hina must be head over heels.
schedule October 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
awww cute! they finally said they love each other
person Sailor Kismet
schedule October 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hot story, very well written, definitely a good read. Thanks ^^
person gryphonwills
schedule October 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Not bad.
schedule October 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is great!
schedule October 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Aw, it was cute. And i loved the end XD "And the Ninja Leader pounded the Captain into the floor all day and all night long." lol XD
schedule October 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is amazing story! Wooohoo.. you got me laughing and enjoying every minute of it.
all I can realyl say is wow. xD Nicely done.
schedule October 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was GENIUS.

Write another one.
person peanut
schedule October 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
XD XD XD Soo cute! Soo funny! Soo Hot! Was laughing non-stop at the end! Naruto & Sasuke are both baka!! But cute baka-s that are meant for each other!!
person Xenobia
schedule October 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was pure unadulterated...evil. Not fair ending the story just as it was getting good.
*Sighs* But...I still love your work.
>X<