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for A Baby Story

by chilepie

person asm613
schedule November 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
(((Naruto’s laughter filled their home and Sasuke’s heart)))___How adorable is this story. It's so nice to read such an uplifting, loving family story.

(((“Papa?” Minato said in a tone that made it clear he was asking if Sasuke was ok.
Naruto smiled. Sasuke’s eyes widened and then glistened as unshed tears formed in them.
“Yes baby, Papa’s fine.”)))___After reading how Sasuke was pouting because Minato wasn't calling him a name yet. Then reading how Minato protected Sasuke while he and Naruto were play fighting-followed by what Minato said and Sasuke's reaction__What a perfect moment. Yeah, warm fuzzies.

Thanks for sharing the story with us.

person Mija
schedule November 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
omg I love this, too cute and really unique so far, and the whole part with Annette was sad but helping to establish a plot me thinks, either way its too funny and I just love the way you write the baby , too cute, cant wait for more, huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
person repanse
schedule November 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sweet story.
Since when Naruto has a bulkier form?XD
person TiaA
schedule November 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is really a feel good story.

Sasuke and Naruto as parents are always interesting to spectulate on and to write about.

Okay, I like what you are doing with their relationship with their children. Little Minato is adorable in his Uchiha-ness. He's spunky, tough, and so smart that you just want to say "aww" each time he is in the scene.
I can't wait for when Sasuke and Naruto go into their discussion and eventual adoption of Annette. She seems like she will need more attention than Minato. I wonder how will the couple cope with not a problem child, but a little girl that suggested to have suffered mental abuse. Children that have been abused have a hard time adjusting and then there are the trust issues. With such a little girl, a toddler, in their lives, it is a such a big cliff-hanger from my prespective.

I enjoyed both chapters and I look forward to the next chapter.

Sean
person Sylvir
schedule October 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was so cute even though I was expecting Sasuke to get called 'Mama'