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awesome story! Keep going!

Ya after a lot more thought i thought i should put this in i love the idea for the story and it is pretty good but you left out some stuff and put stuff in that really doesn't work first of all i don't think under any cercumstances Hinata should know about the Kyuubi right off the bat before hand the people in the village may not like Naruto but they new to shut up when it came to that and Naruto's actions on the whole slave thing don't acount up to how i think he would feel or how the students mind setting on it would be i think he would be more using his athority rather then treat her like normal but not in a cruel manner also Hinata is shy and submissive in general don't fluctuate that keep that way and let Naruto keep the lead sex on the first night is fine but i think it should be part of the mind setting for the male students given they were also most likey taught how to take care of their slaves before hand in the academy in general i think you should also cover more of the reasons behind it as well though i am pretty sure you have the rules and stuff figured out you should have used it in the beginning rather then just jump into it i also think you should limit the girls Naruto gets but also use relationships that are believe able not just crack one for example one between Naruto and femHaku would they have chemistry and what not now Tenten and Naruto who have no real relation to eachother would not be a good one besides i think she would go to Neji overall i just think you didn't change how they were raised with this king of background here are some other stories that may help on this site in various areas Naruto Punishmen in the AU section last time i checked Kouingan - The Seduction Eye and Slaves of the Maelstrom both the the threesome section by the same author (these might help a little bit with the background) either way this ment for constuctive perpouses and i hope it helps you better the story in genral so feel free to send me an email if you wish if you can't find for various reason (me being stupid) plz put in the next chap posting and i will get it to you

Wow, I can see this becoming something awesome! I loooooved your last story and I can't wait to continue reading this one, so hurry up wth the updates. Also, I really hope you put in some lemons with Chouji and Ino (I really like that pairing).

Well this story looks to be a good one. I like how you explained the why isn't holding out for Sakura. Also I am really interested in see that catgirl story of yours.

fantastic start to what can easily be a fantastic story the were a few grammar and spelling errors but it wasnt to bad please update a.s.a.l.a.

Oh, I love this fic so far, hey is it possible for Naruto to capture other slaves from his own village too, like Tenten, Sakura, Ino or maybe even his sensei, Anko or even Tsunade?

I liked it; a few grammar errors (mostly repeated words), but otherwise perfectly good; can't wait to read more (there isn't enough NaruHina being updated these days!).

Man I to take my hat off to you on this one. The idea for this story is so perverted that it's hilarious but at the same time its so brilliant i'm actually a little upset that I didn't think of it first. So I say this is the second time since I started read on this website that a writer does a full rewrite of the serious. Oh and if you need any help to speed the story along let me know.

Sorry i forgot to say this before you but a limit on the number of girls now and keep it around five or six at the most. Your last story was good but you just put to many girls with naruto you should pick out the girls now that way you won't neglect any of them like in you last story.

An interesting idea, I can't wait to see what other girls Naruto gets. I like the idea of the cat girls you mentioned, I'd love reading that fic! I wouldn't mind seeing Kyuubi being female and being forced to submit to Naruto with Hinata's help!