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May 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Yay, you updated. And a nice chapter too. I liked the food sex, though I prefer dessert personally. Cake frosting is my favorite. I can't wait to seeing Isaribi's initiation.;) Hey, since she's aquatic, maybe you could do a hot-sping or bath scene with her. I'm also curious what you're going to do with her. She didn't strike me as much of a combatant, so what will her role be?
But the fight was too short. I get that action isn't the main focus of the story, but could you maybe try to flush out the next fights more.
Keep up the awesome work and please update as soon as you can!
But the fight was too short. I get that action isn't the main focus of the story, but could you maybe try to flush out the next fights more.
Keep up the awesome work and please update as soon as you can!
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May 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Good Chapter, I can't wait for Tayuya to enter.
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May 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
awesome story, i wish there more writers like you
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May 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
thanx for this new chapter .o) will be waiting for more .o)
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May 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
a good way to bring her into the game, the the pounding of the dog-breathed nin was to short and far from brutal enough
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May 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Not a bad fight but the chapter was kinda short granted its been awile so anything was appreciated so i look forward to seeing what you come up with next.
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May 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
so nice to see this updated your works are one of the few that keep me digginf thru the muck here
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May 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm really interested in your story.
Can I ask you a question? Do you think that you will mind if I use ideas from your story in a new Naruto story idea that I'm forming?
It involves Naruto getting a powerful and mysterious summoning contract for Nagas in which he gains a powerful hypnosis dojutsu Kekkai Genkai when he is a little boy. I want this version of Naruto's world to have a similiar 'slave system' through kunoichi can start out as slave or free depending on when they enter the academy. Like if you are a civilian, it depends on how you do on some 'early tests', but if you are part of a ninja clan, it depends on what the clan head says.
For Hinata, her father, Hiashi, puts her into the 'slave system'.
There are also rules of honor within clans which will bound on OC female Uchiha named Sayu to a certain blond haired hero.
So, what do you say?
By the way, your story is really good and I hope that you continue it soon!
Later and best wishes!
Can I ask you a question? Do you think that you will mind if I use ideas from your story in a new Naruto story idea that I'm forming?
It involves Naruto getting a powerful and mysterious summoning contract for Nagas in which he gains a powerful hypnosis dojutsu Kekkai Genkai when he is a little boy. I want this version of Naruto's world to have a similiar 'slave system' through kunoichi can start out as slave or free depending on when they enter the academy. Like if you are a civilian, it depends on how you do on some 'early tests', but if you are part of a ninja clan, it depends on what the clan head says.
For Hinata, her father, Hiashi, puts her into the 'slave system'.
There are also rules of honor within clans which will bound on OC female Uchiha named Sayu to a certain blond haired hero.
So, what do you say?
By the way, your story is really good and I hope that you continue it soon!
Later and best wishes!
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May 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Nice breakfast for Naruto, very well done. I can't wait to see how Isaribi takes to her new master and slave sisters.
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May 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
didn't see that one coming, a bit sad it wasn't sasame, thouhg it makes up with thefact that breakfast was really hot