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for Slave for you

by DarthValgaav

person Astridmp
schedule November 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Allright let's see, where to start... Must atmid I'm a bit disapoited in you: Where's all the other girls in the class... you only had to come up with names for them, but ok: might have been a bit confusing if every boy had started out wiht one or two slaves.
Female Haku and Hinata works fine for Naruto and you works their personality wery well.
As for adding more girls to Naruto's 'colection': slow down there aré other guys in that village, and I'd love to see this story from different views.
Could you let Rock Lee challenge Sasuke for Sakura? We Both know he would win. Or maybe just have her taken from him as ponishment (you know for what) then i'd give her to Shino (finds his bugs quite facinating)
An epic battle between Sasuke and Naruto over Hinata and/or Haku would be great.
I suppose I should end my comment by saying that slavery is just wrong. (But that dosn't mat this story less hot)
person Takai153
schedule November 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter. Loved both lemons, but espacially Hinata and Naruto's first time with anal. Looking forward to more of that. Can't wait to see who the next girl is! Keep up the awesome work and please update as soon as you can.
schedule November 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
glad to see you updated, nice
schedule November 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
great story.
Waiting too hear from you soon
schedule November 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Weird world...

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schedule November 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
For some reason, the way you describe the slave requirements for the exams reminds me of badges in Pokemon...

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person wiper
schedule November 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
thanks for new chapter, i was waiting .o)
i realy like new ideas in sex like anal .o)

now i will wait how will girls interact and new AU girl .o)
person VFSNAKE
schedule November 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Nice! Naruto laid twice! Keep it up.
schedule November 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Awesome chapter can't wait for the next chapter update soon.
person raex18
schedule November 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Good story so far. I hope Temari is going to be in this?