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for Price of Cheating

by NinjaToadsAteMyBaby

person a kitsunes light
schedule November 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
ILOVEDIT!!! And the part about the camera!!! OMG! I SOOO wanna read about it! ahaha I think it would be hilarious to know what sasuke's reaction was!
person lonelyreverance
schedule November 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
more please
schedule November 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh yeah someone deffinitly lives up to thier username. ^^ great fic. I'm always up for sasuke bashing, but you added the itachi/naruto thing too, nice touch. I think it really deserves to be more then a oneshot. its good and I hope you continue it.

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person Anonymous
schedule November 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You could easily extend this into a mutichapter story. Revealing Sasuke's reaction to his car's destruction, trying to work things out with Naruto. Chapters where Itachi and Naruto build a relationship. Sasuke's reaction to losing Naruto to his brother. Maybe even have them use a surrogate to have a child for them, maybe Hinata. Kakashi and Iruka and their antics.

While it is a good one shot it has a lot of potential to be expanded. I think most of us would like to see where this goes next.
person sharem
schedule November 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like the direction this first chapter has gone... I can't wait to read more..XD
person Zeenath
schedule November 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OUUUU!!!!! I love! ^-^ So vindictive! ^-^ So he gonna end up with Itashi by anychance! ^-^
P.S.(Moiira)
schedule November 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
CONTINUE! It would be really cool if you continued this fic. I want to know what
Sasuke's reaction will be and if Naruto and Itachi develop a relationship.
schedule November 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
For the love of god, please continue! Please, for all the (hopefully, if this really is the pairing) ItaNaru-lovers out there!
This fic is original eventhough it has some events that are usual. Like Sasuke marrying someone else to continue his line for example.
Anyway, it's awesome and I kept snickering while reading this. I really like how you portrayed the characters.
So keep up with the good work and good luck with the writing.
Take care. Hugs
person More Than I Appear
schedule November 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ah, that was an amusing read!I loved the orange permanent ink bit- nice touch- but how come no one inside the house came out to investigate the noise once Naruto began laying into the car's glass? I think you could leave this as a one shot or make it into a multichapter story. Good story!
person eviltwinofgaara
schedule November 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
AWESOME! Please continue this story...I can't wait to read more. It kept me enthralled through the entire chapter. Hell, I let my lunch get cold cause I couldn't pull away.