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for Naruto, You're Not Pregnant!

by Jelp

person Kaliu6-san
schedule January 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA you updated!!! Finally!!! This is soooooooo one of my favorite fanfictions! Another great chapter, I hate cliff hangers so you better write the next one quickly!!! OOO i so wanna read what they're gonna talk abou!
schedule January 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Haha.. Sasuke just can't keep away. ^^



Keep up the great work, Jelp!
person jgoodman
schedule November 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Love this story, please update soon
person Timber
schedule November 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I Love this story!!! :) MORE PLEASE!!! SQUEEL!!!!

I thought that was very sweet of Sasuke to give Naruto the baby....I thought he did it as a temporary thing till he was ready to face Naruto....or something like that. But twins I so did not see that comming and am totally excited about it!!! I so can not wait to find out what happens next!!! :)
person ktt
schedule November 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ch-ok...

So I like the plot so far, but I thought I might add a little constructive crit?

You have pretty much 100% dialogue and thoughts. And then descriptions of the dialogue and thoughts, but you have no descriptions of anything else. It's not a bad idea to hammer through the scenes like you've been doing, but in order to go from good story to excellent writing, I think you've gotta flesh out your work a bit.

Good luck, and keep it up!
person Chi
schedule November 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Man, that kicked ass on so many levels
schedule November 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OMG i know what the brother's name is! OMG I did think sasuke gave Masashi up, because he didn't want him. Let me with a surprise. Lol Update soon! BTW I love your story!
person qwerty
schedule November 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Totally did not see that twin angle coming. Great chapter!
Keep going!
schedule November 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
YOU'RE EVIL!!!

please, please, please, please finish!!

miko
schedule November 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
nice chapter it gets more interesting so please update soon

i already love this story