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for Heat Wave

by SuziQ

person lala
schedule February 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
If you're gonna use Japanese, learn to spell right.
"ie" = means "house".
"iie" = means "no".
And "gomen" is more like "sorry" and is used between extremly close friends, not really fitting for the pairing in the story. "gomen nasai" would have fitted better.
All in all it was an interesting oneshot, the pairing's quite unusual and it was well written.
Ja ne.
person polaris
schedule February 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
hot hot hot!I love it!