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Hello my darling! I'm sorry I didn't review the last chapter, but this one can cover both. The sex was HOT, HOT, HOT! I love Kisame and I love how deliciously evil Madara has turned out. I can't wait to see you write what we talked about...Kakashi meeting that special someone! Poor Pein. I don't like to see him hurt. Only Kakashi can make it better. This is the absolute best you've written yet, it's getting so good, that it doesn't even feel like a fan fic anymore. I hope you are online tomorrow. I really want to check in with you and see how you are. Love ya girl! My hero!

ahh you answered my question about the body I asked a few weeks back!

you are weaving your tale through the manga "facts", and doing it very well I might add:)

excellent chapter, with Madara adding so much tension.
how will Kakashi react - after all Kakashi is a little different since he has an Uchia eyeball.
what will Nagato do?!

thanks fo a exciting chapter:)

I promise, I haven't dropped off the face of the earth. I've been out of town alot, and have been unable to reveiw the last two chaps till now. I can just imagine how frail and helpless Itachi must have looked to Kakashi. Especially since Kakashi only knows the strength he's always possesed. I can't wait till they all get together, but I know it can't be rushed. First Pein teases Kakashi with thoughts of the other two, and then Kisame is so gentle and loving to Kakashi while Pein was seeing to Itachi. You portrayed this beautifully. Thanks for all your hard work on this, I miss you girl!

wow it's so weird to think of kisame and kashi doing anything remotely intimate lol. oh and i don't think the inuzukas are telepathic are they? i know they communicate with dogs and such but i may be wrong. yamanakas are more 'mind' centred.

Yamanaka is Ino's clan and do the mind meld thing, but I like your explanation on how
the telepathy works as Pein communicates (with Kakashi over distances and how it
ends up sensual when they do).

oh and Yuki - Kakashi did more than think about it! cool, ne?!

Ah, I absolutely HATE those 'mary sue' fanfics about Pein- and they often make him out to be a traig but secret romantic or an insane, crazy, psychopath with a god complex.

Chapter 41 was... different. It felt like a lull before the storm, and then at the very end, it feels like the "coming soon" sign of the storm. I like those chapters- ones that allow the readers to sit back and slow down their train of thought. It's a nice change, and it gave me a moment to step back and view the situations taking place more clearly.

Somehow, despite everything, you've managed to do a (excuse my language) fucking good job at keeping Pein In character. And Kakashi, too, although Pein is much harder because we know very little about him.

Keep up the good work!

wow - you made kakashi a slut;P

I'm sorry I haven't been able to give you a long, detailed, thoughtful review in a long time. Very busy, and a lot of stuff took up so much time that it was all I could do to print out the latest chapter to read.

Chapter 40 is by far your most erotic chapter yet. Really, the things you make Pein do to Kakashi are astounding. They way I interpret it (and I could be horrifyingly wrong) you're leading this up to a moresome involving Pein, Kakashi, Kisame, and Itachi. I know, this is might be under the spoiler/to-be-revealed later category, but it's just a haunch. Most of your writing is Lemon Cake Bittersweet, something a lot of writers have trouble doing. Because either they make it too sweet and sappy, or to bloody, gory, and so full of angst it makes you want to scream in frustration.

The way you described Nagato's childhood is really sad, considering he's one of those villains who had a really screwed up past and got twisted around the wrong way- he wants to rule the world, because he wants peace. Not your typical "MWAHAHAHAHA I WILL RULE DA WORLD!" bad guy.

Still, though, I have to admit I really really like the idea of a foursome. I don't think that there's a single foursome between Kisame, Itachi, Pein, and Kakashi ANYWHERE on the internet; not on FF, not on AFF, and not on any other site I've ever been to. Which is a shame, because if written correctly, I think it would be completely hot.

But of course, thats just me. =O

To Lividangel: A slut? I don't think so. You heard Kakashi- he wouldn't cheat on Pein. A slut would mean he's already sought out Kisame, Itachi, Deidara (Ka-boom), Tobi/Madara (uh-oh), KAKUZU (oh god, I hate to think of the outcome- although it would probably be pretty hot anyways. =/), and HIDAN (Jashin, no!), Zetsu (no comment) and asked for sex. ;) Kakashi's just thought about it a bit- and who doesn't sometimes?

Oooh, I LOVE the direction this is going.

You're building this up for a fantastic threesome or kisakaka/kakaita/etc aren't you?

If you are, then I'm completely blown over.

The descriptions you gave in ch.40 were completely mind-blowing.