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April 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I knew I saw parallels in the way this relationship and Iruka/Kakashi's
are going. It's an interesting background your setting so to bring
us to the present.
It's also very true that many powerful men want to bottom, they want
to give up that reponsability in bed and be taken care of. So your
Kakashi would absolutely be a natural bottom:)
thank you.
are going. It's an interesting background your setting so to bring
us to the present.
It's also very true that many powerful men want to bottom, they want
to give up that reponsability in bed and be taken care of. So your
Kakashi would absolutely be a natural bottom:)
thank you.
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April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
kakashi is emotionally stunted and when you opened his flood gates
... boy you broke his dam.
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Are you implying more than one thing? =O
And yeah, this chapter was TOTALLY worth waiting for. I'm still rereading it over and over again, because I can't help but try to memorize it. It's that good. =D
... boy you broke his dam.
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Are you implying more than one thing? =O
And yeah, this chapter was TOTALLY worth waiting for. I'm still rereading it over and over again, because I can't help but try to memorize it. It's that good. =D
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April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
"Prince Albert Piercing." We never did learn about that in Sex Ed. in middle school. =O They never teach us the really REALLY important stuff...
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April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ah, I finally realize it now.
Every chapter brings something new to the table, initiates some new sort of progress or another big step being made. Unlike other writers, your chapters do not rely on drabbling and useless fluff to keep the story alive. Impressive, since many writers have difficulty otherwise.
Kakashi has never given a blowjob before, has never been this intimate or close to anyone throughout adulthood... and now you're showing his progress from Sharingan-Emotionally-and-Socially-stunted Kakashi to a more open, relaxed, and willingly expressive Kakashi when he's with Pein. Not only is your writing impressive, but the way you keep showing the PROGRESS he goes through is... amazing.
And how on earth did you know I'm a girl? I thought I did a good enough job hiding that. =O
XD
Anyways, keep writing! =D
Every chapter brings something new to the table, initiates some new sort of progress or another big step being made. Unlike other writers, your chapters do not rely on drabbling and useless fluff to keep the story alive. Impressive, since many writers have difficulty otherwise.
Kakashi has never given a blowjob before, has never been this intimate or close to anyone throughout adulthood... and now you're showing his progress from Sharingan-Emotionally-and-Socially-stunted Kakashi to a more open, relaxed, and willingly expressive Kakashi when he's with Pein. Not only is your writing impressive, but the way you keep showing the PROGRESS he goes through is... amazing.
And how on earth did you know I'm a girl? I thought I did a good enough job hiding that. =O
XD
Anyways, keep writing! =D
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April 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
now I love kakashi-pein ,it's your fault !
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April 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
oh my:)
what a natural progression, and our poor Kakashi is so confused.
so...what did you do with Konan?
what a natural progression, and our poor Kakashi is so confused.
so...what did you do with Konan?
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April 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
"Like this chapter"? I LOVE this chapter! Thanks for clearing up the thing with Konan- I look forward to reading about what happened. =D The way you made the jump from Kakashi simply being Pein's subordinate to his 'teacher', and then 'date' (the restrant), and then making it so that Kakashi could understand exactly WHY Pein was having sex with Itachi, and then finally reaching that point where Kakashi actually accepts Pein... brilliant. You are an amazing writer, with an amazing muse. I've rarely seen any other writers who have come anywhere near of ability on Either FF.net or AFF.net- only three others, actually, (J-pop princess, Sumi Hatake, and sessha battousai.)
The other thing I love is that you actually update regularly, which is something many other writers don't actually do...
I love your work. Keep it up! ^^
The other thing I love is that you actually update regularly, which is something many other writers don't actually do...
I love your work. Keep it up! ^^
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April 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Another thing I especially like is that you find ways to descirbe the attraction to Pein beyond the simple "he's good looking" area that most writers use. When you mention Kakashi feeling a sense of security and safety around him, you give us, the readers, a window into understanding Kakashi's reasons for relenting and willing to be intimate with Pein. I like that.
Another good bit you did was the fact that you translated situations Kakashi normally would have felt anger (Pein's presumptiousness, for example) into ones that he RECOGNIZED that he would have been angry, but finds out himself that his reaction is, instead, arousal. Most writers don't go through the extra time to describe the transition between anger and arousal- they just simply jump to the latter. And the ways you had Kakashi show little bits of trust at time- that was another good thing about this chapter. If Kakashi had simply allowed Pein to do as he wanted, and act as though he had not been in any position to reject him previously, it would have been to fairy-tale-ish, too unrealistic, to cliche.
And, of course, your creativity with the location of certain piercings was interesting. XD
Another good bit you did was the fact that you translated situations Kakashi normally would have felt anger (Pein's presumptiousness, for example) into ones that he RECOGNIZED that he would have been angry, but finds out himself that his reaction is, instead, arousal. Most writers don't go through the extra time to describe the transition between anger and arousal- they just simply jump to the latter. And the ways you had Kakashi show little bits of trust at time- that was another good thing about this chapter. If Kakashi had simply allowed Pein to do as he wanted, and act as though he had not been in any position to reject him previously, it would have been to fairy-tale-ish, too unrealistic, to cliche.
And, of course, your creativity with the location of certain piercings was interesting. XD
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April 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Holy shit! That was worth waiting for...you outdid yourself this time! There's nothing more I can say...Thanks for updating. And I can't wait for the next update! Love ya...Later Beth
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April 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
kakashi is emotionally stunted and when you opened his flood gates
... boy you broke his dam.
cool:)
... boy you broke his dam.
cool:)