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for What Dreams May Come.

by Daydreamer79

person hanyou
schedule March 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
so, it's still a fascinating story. and i must say that i'm incredibly impressed with your ability to update so quickly. it's interesting, and i must say that i really do appreciate the fact that you're taking your time with their new relationship. they aren't hurrying to rush into bed with each other, but they aren't denying the physical lust they feel for each other either, and that's a beautiful, and important part of their new relationship. naruto understands the pain of losing sasuke, and he's not willing to rush into it so quickly that he would push sasuke away again.

i must say that i adore the contrasts between the relationship with them in the village and between them in the present time. it creates a wonderful little contrast that helps to show just how deeply they need each other, how passionately in love with each other they were. and it shows the potential they have for the future.

i must say that sasuke is adorable. i love his innocence, even through that tough exterior. he's able to trust, and the memories that are floating in the back of his mind make it even easier for him to find some kind of comfort with naruto. and naruto. poor naruto. i still love the idea of him being able to last through the centuries until he found his lover again. and while that trial has stripped him of innocent naivete, it has made him stronger. i love that he's still naruto, but he's changed and matured and he's a more guarded person because of it. and yet, that makes his love so much more complete.

there are few things beta-wise that i would suggest need fixing, mostly it's just grammar and punctuation stuff. most of the tense issues you had have been successfully fixed, and it makes the story read all the better because of it. if you got a beta to check those little things, it would fix all of it. or if you'd prefer, i can do it for you too.

but, other than that, this still remains an interesting, fascinating story and i can't wait till i get the chance to read it again! (hopefully when you update)
person Anon
schedule March 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Sasuke's soul definitely knows its home, but his reincarnation is still having trouble believing. Hurry with the next chapter!!
schedule March 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
lol, I guess I shouldn't give you spoilers then, unless you really want them. I mean, Sasuke doesn't go back to Konoha to make peace with his old friends. he gets himself a posse of killers to help him take revenge on the council and more or less destroy konoha, or at least that is his plan in the manga right now.

I was sad that Itachi died too. I love Itachi <3 And I am with you on the Sasuke going back to be with his friends again, alas, I think were are just going to have to keep dreaming.

In the manga right now, Naruto has finally gotten to the eight-tailed stage of his merge with Kyuubi and Hinata confessed her love for him. And he has finally met his dad. So much craziness.

Anyways, I'm really looking forward to more updates. Please continue soon. Ja!
schedule March 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well this was kind of a sad chapter for me. I feel so bad for Naruto. If I was in his position, I don't know what I would do. I mean I do think I would be stuck in the past. Trying to keep alive what I had, and afraid to go towards my future. I would worry that this Sasuke was not the Sasuke of my past. It take's a strong person to walk into the unknown. Thankfully Naruto is strong and with Kyuubi by his side, I am sure he create a new life for himself with this new Sasuke.

Gah, Sasuke though just needs to deal with his feelings and sit and talk with Naruto about their familiarity. Or hell, he just needs to confront Naruto, asking about everything. Then again Sasuke is a master of keeping his emotions in, and denying that anything could be wrong, or hidden from him. I can wait to see his reaction though when he does find out... if he ever learns the whole truth that is...

Although I have a question. If Sasuke learns the truth though, and they do get back together... won't Naruto just stay the same age still and keep on living while Sasuke ages and then dies... or could he draw on his forgotten chakra and learn the jutsu that Jiraiya and Tsunade used? Or did I read over the answer to this. xD lol. Not surprising if I did... I forget things so easily sometimes... shame on me.

Don't get me wrong... I love happy endings too. It's just they are so predictable, and I like the surprise I get when I reach the ending of something and it's tragic. I'm not a crier, but when something makes me tear up, it just seems so much more profound and emotional. I don't know... it's hard for me to explain it. Either way, I need my happy endings just as much as my sad endings... Especially if the middle of the story is angsty then I need a fluffy ending to keep me from feeling emo in the end. As for BSL, it needed to end where it did, to make room for the sequel. Otherwise it just wouldn't have worked as well. So there is still hope for happiness for both Sasuke and Naruto in that. xD

Well thanks again for another wonderful and quickly updated chapter. Much love to you. *gives brownies* <3

-Akiru-
schedule March 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh WOW!! I wonder how much he'll get to see!!
schedule March 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
bouncing up and down.....

OOoooooo Me likey me likey..... Does go to wonder though, Naruto talks about his parents Minato and Kushina. Well considering the others have been reborn, could they have to? I mean he never knew them in their first life. What about this one?
person shadowphoenix143
schedule March 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OMG, the flashback on when Naruto and Sasuke first got together was so freaking funny! I laughed so hard! I could totally picture Naruto doing that to him! Poor Sasuke is trippin. I would be to, if I was somewhere I thought I had never been to and somehow knew where things were, and stuff. I can relate to the déjà vu's however. I get those a lot, and it's always a weird feeling. Awesome chapter!
person roro237
schedule March 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I loved both chapters 10&11! That kiss on the training ground was really hot:) You write sexy kisses! But what warmed me the most was Sasuke knowing all the little things closet,bathroom,toothbrush and the bedroom. The old Sasuke is trying to reach his Naruto. I love this story line! It's sexy and intense and we haven't even had a lemon yet:) I don't want to think I'm rushing a lemon. I agree with you their not read yet. Besides you know what you're doing:) I'm just saying I'll have tissue ready for my nose bleed when the time comes.
schedule March 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
lol ^^

I love how Sasuke is falling into the same patterns of his original life.
Keep up the good work!
schedule March 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Sorry, I haven't reviewed since the first or second chapter I didn't have anything to say in a very good way. I love this story, it's definitely becoming one of my favorites. I think this chapter is one of the best ones. The flashback was great, I can always feel such a raw emotion from Naruto when he is remembering Sasuke or seeing Sasuke and knowing that he can't be with him the way he remembers. I'm glad that we are building up to major intimacy and that as hard as it is for Naruto to not be intimate, for Sasuke they just met. Sasuke's subconscious memory coming into play is a very good thing and I hope that it forces him to really think about what or who I should say he is remembering and dreaming about. I also hope that Naruto thinks about letting Sasuke in on the secret, he might think Naruto is crazy for a while but then again it might bring them closer together.