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by lexjamandme

person Curious
schedule May 29, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I have a question for you that I don't wish to leave in a review, so if you could email me and I'll reply to that email, that would be great.

On another note, I really liked just ask, I thought the bit where all of the guys just show up to ask what their other halves want was brill! I kinda wanna see how he got roped into that job, just because I think it would have been a hilarious situation.

I really enjoyed the fluffiness at the end. You're right but I'll still enjo it while I can.

Thaks for sharing
person Anon
schedule November 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Yaaaaay, fluff fluff fluff!
and i'm really curious about Neji's one, but something tells me I don't want to know...
person samuraisaaya
schedule October 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
AHH! Overloaded with cuteness! This story made me feel so happy :) Thanks so much!
person momhuey8
schedule October 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Beyond beautiful.
schedule May 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Aha! I guessed he was getting treated when they were at the ramen stand! Yay! And I love the cards--especially Neji's! >.<
schedule May 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
aaaaaawww..
this was so sweet, sneaky sasuke ^^
and kinda sw the 'wil you marry me' comming,
but it made it no less wonderfull in it's sweetness.
i love this naruto because, sasuke is seme,
but naruto is not made small, cute, fluffy and weak.
he is a strong hokage, exactly as he should be :)
person Sandy
schedule May 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Loved it - a perfect Valentine's Day tale! Sweet, romantic and oh so hot at the same time! Enjoyed your writing style - the story read like a natural conversation between the characters. The dialogue flowed smoothly and naturally. And your descriptions of their bathhouse were beautiful. I like how the story progressed - only at the end did Naruto (and me) figure out that Sasuke had orchestrated the whole day just for him.

This story just got you added to my "must read" list.
person M.Bomar
schedule May 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This was... perfect. I can't say that it truly surprised me that Sasuke had done it all as the perfect Valentine but I'm notoriously hard to surprise. However, this tale was spun so wonderfully well! I loved the balance of your wording and characterizations, in that you made all the right choices I think. Of course, some would call this OOC but isn't that what fan fiction is? If it was in character then technically it would have been in the series, right?

Besides, my point is that you didn't make Naruto needlessly emo or dwell too much on the bitchy and boody side of Sasuke but rather, you kept the hearts of them. You kept the haughty Uchiha pride in place that you know Sasuke wouldn't easily part with but in private, emphasized just the right amount on the love of the villagers and other people close to Naruto and you wrote Naruto as the tiny bit naive and prankish individual he's meant to be, as well as the portrayal of the others in this work - SPOT ON! ^_^

I'm not a fluff lover but this was absolutely perfect. It was sweet but I didn't feel it was too sweet and it made me just a little teary at the end! (That's high praise because I don't cry for nothing; not for broken bones, flesh wounds or harsh words.) It might have helped that I was listening to Half Acre by Hem but still, I feel a very large amount of the credit there goes to you. It moved me!

I'm a lurker, not much of a reviewer (I know, bad me...) but when I read something this good, I just have to leave a comment. I can safely say that this made my day!

Satan Xellis
person Sabrina
schedule February 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
awww! so cute
schedule February 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Aaahh, the fluff, it burns. Of course it could just be because I've been staring at the TV all day Playing Kingdom Hearts Re:Chain of Memories. Which so far rules, after you get used to the cards. Anyway it was a very cute, cliche, Valantine's Day story. The best kind there is.
BTW, with all the fluff you wright, I'm not surprised you decided to write a death fic. Variety is the spice of life. Sometimes you need to challenge yourself. You can't have fluff wothout angst. I can't think of any other phrases that fit so I'm off and again I liked you're story.

Oh, yeah. Please check out my story, Legends. It's just getting started and I'd like to have feedback from an author as talented as you. And yes I am a shameless review whore.