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For Ino, a demon that influences the mind would be perfect. A siren, for example. I remember a creature that could hypnotize, but i cannot recall its name.

Hi there, I love your story and I can't wait for the next chapter. The only clear suggestion I can make for the girl's demon form is for Tayuya, I would like to see her become a succubus and possibly seduce Hinata or one of the other (I think that might be funny).

Just a little question: When the Kyuubi came out of the seal, was she naked?

Since you seem to be using girls from filler arcs and movies, how about Koyuki of Snow Country, Yakumo of the Kurama clan, Tsubaki(Mizuki's ex-girlfriend), Haruna of Vegetable country, Hokuto from the Hidden Star Village, Toki of Bird Country, and Tsunami of Wave Country? Oh, and is Yugito Nii, jinchuriki of Nibi, still alive? Cause if she is, vote for her as well. And that other female jinchuriki, Fuu? If she's still alive, put her in to.

I like the story so far. It's so original and fun. Like the pairings, too. One pleading request is for Tayuya to be in the harem. Tayuya Rules! And NO ONE who is male works with her other than Naruto. Plus there's the whole Minato/Kushina feel to that couple. You know, goofy blond liking strong red-heads(hehehe)! Please consider this one for me.


Sincerely,
Tayuya Fangirl

Hells Yes Tayuya, Anko, Ayame, and Shion should be in the harem!! Tayuya was HOT!!!!!! and CS2 was even HOTTER!!!!!!!!!! and Anko is like another Tayuya only five years older(she looks 19 in the first half of the series, not 24) so the two of them together would milk him dry and he would LOVE IT!!

Hi, me again. Just read chapter two and had to let you know that I think it was really well written. I like the parts with Sakura and Hinata the best but there are plenty of other parts that made me happy too so great job. Can't say Sakura's mom's reaction was a surprise, but it was still harsh. Very convincing.

As for some of your ideas, I'd like to say a few things.

Tayuya - HELLS YES!!!

Ino and Temari - I'm likin' Ino for this fic but Temari might be a stretch. Don't get me wrong. She's awesome and works so much better with Naruto than Lazymaru, but I wouldn't put too many with Naruto too soon. Mabye latter on....

Tsume - They did have a pretty funny relationship n the filler arcs so yeah, go for it. But remember, her husband didn't die on her - HE LEFT HER. She might not be so easy to convince. And Hana has a better relationship with Naruto than Tsume as far as I know, but I could be wrong. I'll have to watch the arc again to be sure.

Tenten - Don't have a problem with this one, but you are shorting Neji and Lee on romantic interests(unless they're gay -_^).

Tsunade - Only if he stops calling her 'granny'. That's just TOO creapy(@_@)!

Yugito - GO FOR IT!!

Sasame - Eh, maybe. Orange haired girls ARE kinda hot...(thinks of Orihime from Bleach).

Kurenai - No. Please no. Asuma may be annoying but I like they're couple.

Hanabi - Honestly, I'm bias with her and Konohamaru. I don't really like him and I love her. Konohamaru is like the Naruto that eveyone else saw when they looked at him(Naruto) and he fits the 'dobe' role much better than Naruto does. But If you like him than please don't make Hanabi girly over him. I like her being the strong proud Hyuuga heir the one would expect her to be and I think he should Work for it if he wants to prove he's worthy of her. It will make their love all the more convincing. Though, if you don't put Moegi with Naruto then DON'T put her in a threesome with Ko and Hanabi. No harem for him!!!

Hana - Sucks that you pulled her from the running but I can live with it.




And as for Hinata's hanyou form I'm definitely for the Yuki Onna. That sounds great.





All in all, this story is shaping up to be a very good story and I look forward to reading the next installment.

Til next time!

good story. more please when u get a chance thanks

Very nice. I agree with Tenten the spider girl, Tayuya the succubus, and Anko the gorgon. Though Anko should be able to turn her lower body into a giant snake body to give a full body hug to someone.

Nice.

Long time no see, pal. ^^ Finaly the story progresses and it was worth the waiting. I would include at least ino as well. Maybe as something catlike (she has some traits of a cat in my opinion, namely her short temper, but i can imagine her also as the playful type).

Personally I don't know about Ten Ten. In my opinion she resides better with Neji. As for Temari, well she works well with Shikamaru I think, but could also be a good match with Naruto. Kamaitachi is a good Idea for this variant. But in that case, Shikamaru will need a new girl ^^ (I don't think he and Ino would work well, so ijno is better with Naruto then Temari in my book).

For Tayua I suggest that you take a variant of her Cursed Seal 2 form. Mabe without the horns (or smaller ones, like Lum in Urusei yatsura).

I think you will make the right decisions. I will wait patiently for the next update.

tenten could use the magnetic ability. with her knack for weapons