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nice story.
Tayuya I think should be a Succubus. Give here curse seal level two pale skin and wings and there you go. Plus it fits with her illusion attacks.

Temari uses kamaitachi-inspired techniques including the summoning of a kamaitachi named Kamatari. So kamaitachi fits her well.

Tenten I lke the idea of her being a Jorôgumo/spider-woman.

I really love your story so far. It has good background story and it's really credible. As for the Naruto future mate, I really like Sakura and Hinata since, I like them both with Naruto and I can choose one for Naruto. Ino and Temari, I don't really mind (Even if I really like Temari with Shikamaru), Tsunade...O.O, she's like a second mother to Naruto but, if you have a good idea, I don't really mind ether (As long as it's after Jiraya's death). As for the other, I really don't know them that much so, I can't really put my opinion on them.

Also, I like that the other are include...What I hate in most adult fanfiction is when there is no background story behind the sexual intercourse and that only the main characters of the story or in it. Continue to make all the character realistic like you did...I laugh really hard about Kiba's comment of the Kyuubi attack because of PMS problem.

Continue you're wonderful work, I'm eager to read the rest!!

I'd like it if you could add the 5th Mizukage, Yakumo, Koyuki, Yugito, Nibi(with Yoruichi's body preferably(with the usual cat ears and tail, for a good look of what she'd look like go to "http://doujinland.com/g/?level=picture&id=16540") also Fu the holder of the Shichibi, and Fuka(the woman from the anime Shippuden the has a killer kiss(who was actually Naruto's first 'real' kiss).

Awesome chapter.


Ch.03

Awesome chapter! I hope that you do another one soon, and I think I have a pretty good idea what will happen with Sakura's mom if you choose to indulge that further. They'll probably try to explain the situation to her but she won't listen and just think it's another one of "The Demon Brat's" lies. Well, that's what I think might happen, but it's your story so do what you will with it.

Nice! Naruto is going to get his revenge and get laid soon. Hinata's dream will come true. Pun intended. LOL!

could you include Guren and Sasame?

Hey I like the story and plot of it so far. Hope to see your update for it soon. I hope you get the next chapter up and this story becomes a great hit

I hopr live is good for you and that you havn't given up on this story. With just 2 chap's it is still a great read that could become even better with time and chap's.

i would include tayuya