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An interesting concept that promises a lot of freedom with character development. What I mean is that a hanyou change in a girl could also result in some personality changes as well which leaves you open for many different possibilities with each girl. One example of this would be that with Hinata you could have her lose her self deprecating side and gain more confidence which would hopefully lessen the fainting and stuttering. I also liked your idea of having the girls have various transformations when they become a hanyou (instead of all of them being a fox type). I am quite interested in where you plan to move Naruto and Sakura (and whoever else eventually joins them) since I have to assume they will try to get a place where they aren't likely to be bothered by villagers or demon hating ninja. I don't know if you have had any suggestions for this but thought I'd throw a couple at you just so you'd have some input. They could relocate to somewhere in the Forest of Death seeing that villagers would most likely be killed if they tried to wander around in there. My other location is kind of vague but maybe have an underground compound inside the village. Of course the door to get in might either have to be hidden or have seal on it so only certain people can get inside (you could have to swipe your blood on it or something). Anyway I really enjoyed the story so far and it is obvious you have put a lot of thought behind this (it is noticeable by the depth of the story). I look forward to reading more on your next update.

A very interesting story you have here. Too bad Sakura's mom was a slave to her grudge. Now, I have a suggestion should you decide to bring Anko into the harem. This does not come from Japanese mythology I'm afraid, as I don't know if they had anything like it, but its from Hindu and Buddhist mythology (which got highly involved in Asian mythology). If you put Anko in, I would suggest you make her into a Naga, a being with a human-like upper half and a snake tail for a lower half. This form is not unheard of, and Echidna (the mother of all monsters from Greek Mythology) was said to have a similar form, a beautiful maiden-like upper half and serpent tail for a lower half. As I said this is all a suggestion, you are the author so you decide what to do with it, I'm just offering.

Am still waiting on the next chapter and I just love the story

I really like your idé's and I can't wait for the next chapter to be up!!! I would like Hinata to be the yuki kind of demon then kitsune!

the main reason no one mentions the pre time skip ages is that it is usually someone either the same age or in the case of hanabi still young enough to be about the same age, in this case with moegi you would have someone signifigantly more mature than her at 12 if you hadnt been planning on ageing her up it would just be wrong unless this had been pre time-skip when they would all still be kids, which in todays society isnt encouraged but isnt looked down upon, rather than the adult - child relationship this could have turned into.

I vote for Yuki Onna for Hinata, it really does fit her. I really like this fic so far and the way you've got it playing out. I'm looking forward to what you do next. Keep up the good work and I shall jump on the next chapter when you post it.

wow i want more this is such an interesting story that i can hardly wait for the next chapter plz hurry. also i like the Yuki Onna perspective for hinata i feel that it fits her perfectly.

Just a thought: Why not post a this FF>net maybe have a clean verison there and uncut here...As for Hinata I'd go with Yuki-onna. With Tayuya I'd go with Succubus. With Temari I'd go with tengu. Speaking of Tayuya why not have her in a restricted section of the Clinic broken but, alive.

Just another thought: In the first chapter I would have thought Sakura would have put up more of a fight with her innerself.


Bad thought: I feel sorry for Itachi....

Hi love your story I was wondering when you might update and if you might put this On normal Fanfiction.com as the way you are doing this if you put a warning on it I think it would do qiut well anyway please if you can let me konw when you might update because this fic is addictive

So far so good, I'm really liking where, and how this story is progressing. While there is no 'smut' in these first two chapters, you make up for that with a good plot and beliveable events, I will definetly keep a watch out for future chapters.

Hinata becoming a Yuki Onna like Mizore from Rosaro+Vampire? yes,yes, Yes, Yes, YES, YES, HELL YES! Not only is Mizore one of my favorite characters, but their personalitys are just about identical. And why do I get the feeling that you're going to turn Tayuya into a sexy succubus like Kurumu from Rosaro+Vampire