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Sakura such I bitch I wish she will just go home, I can't wait to read what happens at the party.

WOW! I just find your fic and almost jump of my chair when i saw how many chapters have you writen!!!!
Nuts!!! But congrats! You got a lot of imagination!

"Our strategy is to get him into a situation where surrender is his best option."

How nice for them. So they're going to persuade the crazy ninja space-time master that he should surrender... how, exactly? That's not a strategy, that's wishful thinking.

The thing is, you're writing this NaruSasu fic about the effect living somewhere more like the modern world would have on their characters... but then you've got this sort of political thread about how Naruto still wants to defeat Akatsuki and become Hokage. And he can't do that from Music Town. So it seems like he's behaving selfishly, because there are people in Konoha depending on him, and he says he wants to help them, but he's not really doing anything about it. (Okay, he gave an interview and he's trying to get a book reprinted. So how does that help him influence the Daimyo? How does that help him build relationships with foreign leaders? How does that help him make contacts with resistance to Danzou inside Konoha? These are all things he should be thinking about, and he's not.) I know in this chapter you're sort of suggesting it's not Naruto's problem - and I'd agree it's not up to him to establish world peace for everyone - but I'm Alright So Screw Everyone Else isn't an attitude I can /ever/ see Naruto adopting.

Great chapter I can't wait for Naruto and Sasuke to have a child of their own.

I have to say that I loved your first story The Canalized River., even if it didn't have a single lemon in it. I liked it very much and the way you wrote it, Ireland need a lemon. As for this story, the lemons are there and they are good. ............. However, I have read every chapter of this story, stuck with it from the beginning. But I find myself less and less likely click on it when you update. Not because you writing has changed because it hasn't, but due to the fact that it feels this story is never going to end. It has gotten far to long with a plot that seems to be going no where. It appears that you yourself don't know how the story will end, that is why you keep adding chapters that has nothing to do with the plot of the story at all. I wonder if you have written yourself into a corner and don't know how to get out of it. Personally all this random stuff with Sasuke, him wanting to go to the police and him wanting to be punished is not needed. The original plot was for them to bring down danzo and you have strayed so far from it, which again begs the question do you even know how the story will end if at all. It seems you are more concerned about them experiencing new things then actually continuing the plot. I'm not trying to flame you as i do like your stories it is just this story has gotten way, way to long and I have noticed you are losing readers and you hardly get any reviews anymore which is very likely directly related to the length and endless plot. It is your story and you can write how you want, but you should probably start wrapping this story up soon before it goes so long that nobody will be reading it because there will never be an ending.

Again I'm not trying to flame you, I like the way you write, and I'm sorry if seem harsh, that isn't my intention. In fact I have put off writing this review for several chapters, hoping things would start changing, but they haven't so I broke down and wrote this review. I'm sorry if you take this as a flame, but all I am doing is just offering you my concerns for the story.

sasuke you dolt can't leave well enough alone can ya ya like a dog licking stitches not smart, oh well, we'll see susanna how things go.

you know where to find me if you want to talk *stern fatherly look at the authoress*

I admire the way you have stuck with this story, expanding the details and exploring moral issues.

Sasuke and Naruto bonding with the baby...too cute. But the mood was ruined when Sasuke talked about his little cousin..*sniffles*

Woohoo! Getting interesting, very interesting indeed. At first when I read the summary I had assumed that there would be a portal to the modern world that we live in. I was wrong, obviously, but this town in the west still seems interesting. Yay! Sasuke and naruto meet all so suddenly! Thanks for writing, I'm liking the story so far!

Heh, I really like how sasuke is following naruto around and feels uneasy in the crowds. I also like how team tala decided to stay with naruto even though sasuke had just said they'd be leaving soon. Still liking the story so thanks!