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May 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Really, they could be so cute when they don't mean to. XDDDDDDDD
Me thinks Itachi was trying to do something that night that Naruto saw him in the hallway. Something like what his dad did. I thought he would just be emotionally stunted and withdrawn. :(
BTW, since it sounds like most of the Uchiha family has some sort of crazy coursing through their blood, I feel kinda bad that Obito sounds pretty sane. And surprised that the most un-Uchiha family member would be the most sane of the family. Either that or is Fukakau's line the only one that is filled with crazy? XD
Oh Orochi... whatever you do, you'll always be a pedo in our minds. Even when you're just trying to help, you give off the creepy vibes by the thousands. Too bad you didn't add his weird tongue licking habit, that would have made it so much more creepy and yuck. And the comment Naruto made of Orochimaru imagining them in a porn photograph... ewwwwwww. XD
Sad that I caught more mistakes. T^T
~~~SPOILER~~~~~
Madara and his brother. From what we got in the manga, the brother seemed freakily happy to sacrifice himself for Madara and can't wait how you'll weave that canon into your story. :D
I hope I'm not double posting this since AFF froze on me when I sent it earlier. D:
Me thinks Itachi was trying to do something that night that Naruto saw him in the hallway. Something like what his dad did. I thought he would just be emotionally stunted and withdrawn. :(
BTW, since it sounds like most of the Uchiha family has some sort of crazy coursing through their blood, I feel kinda bad that Obito sounds pretty sane. And surprised that the most un-Uchiha family member would be the most sane of the family. Either that or is Fukakau's line the only one that is filled with crazy? XD
Oh Orochi... whatever you do, you'll always be a pedo in our minds. Even when you're just trying to help, you give off the creepy vibes by the thousands. Too bad you didn't add his weird tongue licking habit, that would have made it so much more creepy and yuck. And the comment Naruto made of Orochimaru imagining them in a porn photograph... ewwwwwww. XD
Sad that I caught more mistakes. T^T
~~~SPOILER~~~~~
Madara and his brother. From what we got in the manga, the brother seemed freakily happy to sacrifice himself for Madara and can't wait how you'll weave that canon into your story. :D
I hope I'm not double posting this since AFF froze on me when I sent it earlier. D:
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May 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting and sweet story!
Sasuke and Naruto's relationship so far is written very well and realisticly. I like how their first kiss was initiated. So touching. I firmly believe in ghosts so the imagery you used in describing the ghost painted such a picture for me. Absolutely fantastic.
I'm really, really loving the story and I'm so excited to see how the boys' relationship develops and how the plot thickens.
Please please update soon :)
Sasuke and Naruto's relationship so far is written very well and realisticly. I like how their first kiss was initiated. So touching. I firmly believe in ghosts so the imagery you used in describing the ghost painted such a picture for me. Absolutely fantastic.
I'm really, really loving the story and I'm so excited to see how the boys' relationship develops and how the plot thickens.
Please please update soon :)
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May 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hooray for breakthroughs! How do you come up with this stuff?
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May 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
awwwwwwwwwwww I love this, still being Sasuke but not a TOTAL ass lol, and the whole sleep thingy was too cute, but omg the description of the boy with no eyes and always bleeding?? Ok I would soooo be freaked out if I saw this ALL the time, and WHY did you cut it off when they was about to have smex???!!! I was soooooooo ready, or were they NOT going to have smex?? I thought they were, but that could be me just wishing it, lol, cant wait for more, I LOVE ALL your fics they are so well written and nice long chapters and unique, ty ty ty for the wonderful and awesome reads, much huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
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May 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Man I'm actually hoping it really is a ghost...I don't want Sasuke to be crazier that he already is....
Post soon!!!
Post soon!!!
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April 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh I can't wait for more! Especially as I know a little bit of what's coming. . .
I loved Sasuke's descent into madness, or else the trials of suffering a haunting. I love also that it really could, at this point, still be taken either way. It's almost reminiscent of Hide and Seek. I don't know if you are familiar with the film or the book, but there are elements to your story that are just as creepy and, for lack of a better word, haunting.
Lily, my dear Lily, I do so enjoy how you portray your characters. They speak of such heavy things at times, and yet usually with such dark humor or nonchalance that it almost escapes the reader what a stain it could truly be to their well being. And yet, there is always a sense of hope, as if salvation could really come in the form of love. I really think it's unique, how you symbolize it. I also think that the pace of the relationship is well set, not too fast, but right on track.
Now, if only your fingers would acquire the speed of the Gods, so I can have more to delve my own fingers into, like kneeding a tough bread-dough. I worry it, and it gives me terrific terror elements that, for moments, have me wanting to double check all the dark places. It works so well here, and yet is a different horror style than your other story, Never Leave Me, which I recomend to anyone reading the review section.
A friend of mine once told me that they could not drive late at night, or get to sleep inside that dead hour, if they watched a particularly good horror flick. Your stories, the way you delve properly into the psyche as well as the things that could, possibly, (if you're unlucky enough) go bump in the night, are like that. Here's to bumping back, so I can have at least one more go at the horrors you are sure to create.
I loved Sasuke's descent into madness, or else the trials of suffering a haunting. I love also that it really could, at this point, still be taken either way. It's almost reminiscent of Hide and Seek. I don't know if you are familiar with the film or the book, but there are elements to your story that are just as creepy and, for lack of a better word, haunting.
Lily, my dear Lily, I do so enjoy how you portray your characters. They speak of such heavy things at times, and yet usually with such dark humor or nonchalance that it almost escapes the reader what a stain it could truly be to their well being. And yet, there is always a sense of hope, as if salvation could really come in the form of love. I really think it's unique, how you symbolize it. I also think that the pace of the relationship is well set, not too fast, but right on track.
Now, if only your fingers would acquire the speed of the Gods, so I can have more to delve my own fingers into, like kneeding a tough bread-dough. I worry it, and it gives me terrific terror elements that, for moments, have me wanting to double check all the dark places. It works so well here, and yet is a different horror style than your other story, Never Leave Me, which I recomend to anyone reading the review section.
A friend of mine once told me that they could not drive late at night, or get to sleep inside that dead hour, if they watched a particularly good horror flick. Your stories, the way you delve properly into the psyche as well as the things that could, possibly, (if you're unlucky enough) go bump in the night, are like that. Here's to bumping back, so I can have at least one more go at the horrors you are sure to create.
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April 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
So...Sasuke's finally flipped his wig. That day was coming.
Great chapter.
Great chapter.
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April 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
The crazy shit is about to hit the fan now!!!
Can't wait!!!
Post soon!
Can't wait!!!
Post soon!
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April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
LOL finally reading it for fun. (Although I saw stuff that I missed. D:)
Any reason why you mentioned Naruto's cherry popping other than something memorable during the vacation? Aka someone who's somewhat important to the story? (Sai? XD)
My heart's been stolen by your Kakashi. He's so perverted but, at the same time, as observant as ever. I bet he let Naruto hear that night with Obito on purpose just to get a laugh. I mean, Naruto thinks he didn't mean it but Kakashi's a perv so I'll believe otherwise. XD
Itachi's funny too. I admire his ability to look serious and snark while being somewhat respectful. Wish I could do that without smiling. And the married comment... me thinks he's not happy either. XD
Naruto's so accommodating of everyone, charming and insightful. I love how Naruto has to keep saying that he promised to behave... he trying to convince himself to behave? And also... "He half-turned, just enough to show me a smirk – one of those that make a stomach quiver in the way that I really didn’t want to associate with Obito’s bastardly nephew. " Ahaha, Naruto got done in by Sasuke's arrogantly sexy smirk. XD
Sasuke's still the love-able bastard that I we all know. Wonder what was in his bag that he had to barge in on Naruto's bath time (if he wasn't meaning to peep). I mean, he gave up looking for it when Naruto started to get angry and if he'd give up that quickly... it doesn't sound important enough to barge in on someone. And smaller Sasuke... dunno why I like that idea/image. XD
Pinning Sasuke to the sink... yummy image. |D
Favorite quote for this part... "Kakashi whispered, but not low enough for people to miss it if they paid attention. “You know what would help you two get along better?” Some dramatically pausing later, he answered his own question. “A nice bottle of some scented lube.”" The moment I read this, I fell in love with Kakashi. Usually I'm indifferent to Kakashi but this... made of pure win. XD
Still curious as to what the quote has to do with the story in general and can't want for the next part. I wanna know how Naruto fixes his mistake, especially since asshole Sasuke is so much better than Ice queen Sasuke. And, can I assume the cute kitty is Kyuubi? XD
Any reason why you mentioned Naruto's cherry popping other than something memorable during the vacation? Aka someone who's somewhat important to the story? (Sai? XD)
My heart's been stolen by your Kakashi. He's so perverted but, at the same time, as observant as ever. I bet he let Naruto hear that night with Obito on purpose just to get a laugh. I mean, Naruto thinks he didn't mean it but Kakashi's a perv so I'll believe otherwise. XD
Itachi's funny too. I admire his ability to look serious and snark while being somewhat respectful. Wish I could do that without smiling. And the married comment... me thinks he's not happy either. XD
Naruto's so accommodating of everyone, charming and insightful. I love how Naruto has to keep saying that he promised to behave... he trying to convince himself to behave? And also... "He half-turned, just enough to show me a smirk – one of those that make a stomach quiver in the way that I really didn’t want to associate with Obito’s bastardly nephew. " Ahaha, Naruto got done in by Sasuke's arrogantly sexy smirk. XD
Sasuke's still the love-able bastard that I we all know. Wonder what was in his bag that he had to barge in on Naruto's bath time (if he wasn't meaning to peep). I mean, he gave up looking for it when Naruto started to get angry and if he'd give up that quickly... it doesn't sound important enough to barge in on someone. And smaller Sasuke... dunno why I like that idea/image. XD
Pinning Sasuke to the sink... yummy image. |D
Favorite quote for this part... "Kakashi whispered, but not low enough for people to miss it if they paid attention. “You know what would help you two get along better?” Some dramatically pausing later, he answered his own question. “A nice bottle of some scented lube.”" The moment I read this, I fell in love with Kakashi. Usually I'm indifferent to Kakashi but this... made of pure win. XD
Still curious as to what the quote has to do with the story in general and can't want for the next part. I wanna know how Naruto fixes his mistake, especially since asshole Sasuke is so much better than Ice queen Sasuke. And, can I assume the cute kitty is Kyuubi? XD
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April 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I almost felt a twinge of guilt when Naruto let the cat into Sasuke's room, then the bastard opened his mouth...!
Post more!!! Please!!!
Post more!!! Please!!!