rate_review Reviews

Love it. Especially like the idea of Neji writing his name on Shika's ass... but I've always appreciated that particular kink. And the smexyness, the details... it's good :)

“…he’d sit in his office, randomly shout obscenities and pull at his hair before going into the bathroom to beat off in a stall.” Okay, I about spit out my tea on my pretty new laptop thanks to that genius line.

“…slow but sure descent into batshit insanity.” ARE YOU TRYING TO KILL MY LAPTOP. Evil woman.
I adore your paragraph describing Zabuza. You are so damn witty. Makes me want to pinch your cheeks.

“…nutritionally bankrupt meal and a five-finger salute to his solitude.” AMAZING turn of phrase. I am such a word whore and you are really making me a happy camper here. XD

This sex was absolutely steamy. I loved Shikamaru’s insistence on slowing down. Very in character. The foreplay and the teasing so very realistic, and the dirty talk was sooooooo hot. Nice all around.

The ending was perfect. I adored it. You did a great job. I’d love to see your Zabuza somewhere again. Had to be my favorite characterization I’ve ever read of him in an AU.

My only crit is that the shift in POV sometimes confused me. We’d be in Shika’s POV and then Rock Lee would suddenly be thinking. Also, there’s something indescribably HOT about not knowing if the other male is attracted (e.g., we already know Shika and Neji are attracted to each other). I only notice this because it has been a focus of my own work lately, to stay in one POV for a whole scene, and BOY is it a pain. LOL

Overall, amazing job. I’ll be sure to check out some of your other fics in my down time. Glad I got to read this!!

EDIT: Fuck, sorry for the reposting. Damn site keeps cutting off my review…arg.

Ah, fun.
That was a great read.
Loved the sexual tension between Lee and Ten; fantastic.
The way Neji and Shikamaru were characterized really worked; I don't mind some OOC, especially if an AU.
Zabuza was awesome; Haku was just cute.
All in all, very enjoyable.
Now, off to read the sequel; yay!
(and see if my suspicions were right on who Shika's ex is)

Luv,
Prpl Grl

Love it love it! I love your characterizations of everyone. Neji is sexy as all hell!!! Uptight yet needy. Him being ready to have the car pulled over to the side of the road....Such a slutty Neji *loves you for writing him* ^_^

I love their new roles, I squealed and giggled like a little schoolgirl, and I m not ashamed of it!

Peace-Love-Yaoi

I like it!

lol how did those two end up in jail lmao. lol love it.

I vote for Lee/Tenten to go on, but I don't want him to gloat too much like "I fucked her into submission... some sex with ME makes it all better..." I'm not saying you'd do that, but I've seen stories which turned out like this :/ Of course it's your story, you do what you want, but I like it, when girls surprise guys too, not only vice versa. Other than that, I like it very much - I love your ShikaNejiShika fics! Thank you for your hard work! :D

Dude, you write the best stuff. Seriously. Keep going!

I loved it!can't wait!!There is not enough fics with this two ou there...I really like your stories, this would be no diferent.