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Can't wait for more. this Story is really different and I look forward to the next chapter.

lmao! man that's funny! i wanna read the next so bad now

Normally I'm not emotionally affected by stories, but in this story I can't help but to be embarrassed for Naruto. *lol*
Poor Sasuke getting his hopes up for being finally acknowledged by his brother.
Well I'm waiting for the next chapters, I've a feeling that'll be a good story. ;-)

It's slightly disappointing to see you go from "Afraid of the Dark," where it seemed like you had everything sorted out in your head and the work was proofread, to "While Naruto had never met Gaara's older brother, Kankuro, he knew that Kiba and Kankuro were good friends, even though Naruto had never met him." It almost seems like you're a different writer. I'm not sure whether it's just my style of reading, but there are some points where there is too much information given at a specific time, such as the characters' emotions or their perspectives. It kind of takes away from their mysterious sides when the POV jumps from person to person. The first chapter hasn't really revealed how the story will be, but I've liked your work so far, so I'll look out for the next chapter. I apologize if you're offended, but I hope to point out these things as a reader for you as a writer to see.

hahaha, great first chapter
keep going!

MWAHAHAHAHAHHAA!!!!!! *dies laughing* Oh! That was just GREAT! The PERFECT Uzumaki introduction! hehehehehehehee..... *wiping tears* I can't wait to see what happens next. *snicker-snicker* PLease update soon.