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November 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
haven't read this in a while; some lazy ass I am
but actually I haven't had a computer and lo and behold aff.net hentai section gets overrun daily.
This series is kinda funny/crazy/interesting. I actually find what Sasori does in this amusing as hell (especially the one with everyone catching him on top of Sakura.)
please tell me there's more with uh.....more experimentation.
but actually I haven't had a computer and lo and behold aff.net hentai section gets overrun daily.
This series is kinda funny/crazy/interesting. I actually find what Sasori does in this amusing as hell (especially the one with everyone catching him on top of Sakura.)
please tell me there's more with uh.....more experimentation.
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July 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
An interesting follow-up to the first two. I was a bit confused by the use of "would" throughout the story, though. It felt like you were describing Sakura's daydream - i.e. if Sakura did this, then Sasori would do that. Then Sakura would do... and so on. I think going back and taking out a bunch of those would help tighten up the story. Keep up the good work!