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*wicked grin* You just helped me out with a potential problem in my own story. I owe you one! Also, poor Anko, to be exposed to Jiraiya's books! XD Good thing she doesn't understand them, or she'd be scarred for life (Or turn out like Kakashi: infatuated with them).

Well however you came to your decision let me raise my glass of Pepsi in respect. Anko sounded perfect as child trying to act grown up. Also describing Orochimaru's eyes as golden was interesting. It's a vivid comparison and not one I would've thought of before given his personality. However, there's a small error in your second to last paragraph. Also it's nice to see that you got over your author's angst-filled moment. It gives me hope that I can get over mine.

I like the way that this chapter turned out! sometimes we are all just a little bit too critical of ourselves. :)
I like the fight scene there at the end, and how Anko 'learned' about the birds and the bees.

I got to the end of this chapter and literally started screaming "NOOOO!" over and over. xD. While I don't there should be explicit sex YET, I do say he should sorta test her. Kiss her and get all touchy-feely, but when it comes to the big moment, she'll tell him to do it ("Don't treat me like a child!"), but she'll be so panicky that he'll notice, roll over and go to sleep. At least that's what I'D write.

By the way, I'm sorta in love with your story. Don't let it dieeeeee~

no please don't put a sex scene with an 9 year old anko! i can't read it anymore cause no 8 year old knows or wants sex really. a kiss is ok, but no more.

the next chapter i want to see Anko and Orochimaru make love

Aww man leaving us at the kiss again! Poor Anko, killer instincts, but still just a kid. I wanna hug orochimaru now. He could be so snuggly but it wouldn't be worth it, he'd kill me lol.

You know I am going to say that Anko reaction was kind of understandable. Well from her point of view at least. Again I was able to visualize the fight scene without a problem, so my compliments to you on that. As for your question I think that such things should grow out from the story as a necessity and as a result I think you are the only one capable of making that decision. Not helpful I know and I'm sorry, but that's what I believe.

Hmmmm . . . well, it's been eight chapters free of anything too questionable. Perhaps you could make Orochimaru attempt something, but not go all the way yet, you know? (And you really think I deserve reviews on my stories? [gets the WAFFs] I love reviews, like any writer, but people just don't seem to like OC stories. ^^') Anyway, back to yours. I don't think you made Anko change her mind too quickly about killing the ninja. The thing about kids is, if they're feeling guilty, all they need is reassurance from someone they look up to, and everything is fine again.

Really like this! as for the impasse, do what you think is best, it's your story. or, if you can't decide, write what your muse feeds you, don't try to force it. :)