rate_review Reviews

Hey man, really like you story. I was wondering if I can take a crack at continue it?

Absolutely stunning story has great comedy throughout with the plot progressing nicely. This may be one of the best Naruto fanfictions i've ever read pity it was taken down from ff.net as the extra chapters on there written by lula..something..moved a bit to fast/haphazardly. There are only a few stories that even compare to this the original version (so good i searched google to see if it was posted somewhere else when i came to read it again).

I don't know if the author ever checks any reviews on here anymore but i do hope they can find motivation to bring this story back to life.

Randomly, I thought of this fic and realized something I never knew I hated about this fic. He ends up with Ino. That's not bad, it's that Tenten was finding out how great a friend Naruto really is and was starting to push for them to be more when all the other girls became jealous(basically) and only THEN did they realize how great he was and NOW they want him. Cept Kin, Naruto is a dick for being a pussy abou her feelings cuz he's all "I'm not worthy" emo-shit

plz write more this is a good fic and i really want to see how the story plays out. you can't jus leave us hang sooo plzzzzz write more

please for the love of god, update this fic. i love it so much. it is funny, smart, and well though out. well cant wait for it to update. write on my wayward author

While I do like the story, it's loaded with grammatical errors. But I won't get into that right now, what I'm here for is to inform you that chapter three(Raven Haired Nymphet)isn't a "continuation" of anything, it's the exactly the same as chapter two, starting from Ino window-shopping. I don't know why no one has pointed that out yet, but it's something that needs to be taken care of, otherwise it's a double-post, not a legitimate chapter.

Love the story! Keep up the good work; I wouldn't mind some more graphic lemons, but I'm a pervert, so that's a given.