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October 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh my God.... I actually cried a little. I felt so horrible for Naruto. Knowing Sakura she still probably treats Naruto like dirt and lords it over everyone that she is now Sakura Uchiha. She is ninja as well- how can she not know that Sasuke is sneakiing out every night... or is she in denial?
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October 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I would love to see this continue. Naruto deserves some happiness.
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September 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
this has the potential to be so very good. there is so much passion and pain between naruto and sasuke, so much trust between them and desperation. i really rather enjoyed it, but i feel that if you had had somebody to beta this, it would have taken it to the next level.
there are too many words repeated too often. there are some tense changes that need addressing. and there are some misspelled words (though not many).
other than that, this is a good story. with the help of a beta, you would make it a great story.
there are too many words repeated too often. there are some tense changes that need addressing. and there are some misspelled words (though not many).
other than that, this is a good story. with the help of a beta, you would make it a great story.
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September 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
...DX Please don't stop!!!
This sounds like such an awesome beginning to an epic fic.
I would love it sooo sooo soooooooo much if you did either a sequel or a continuation of how sasuke broke away from the family and starts an open relationship with naruto.
The ending as it is now, is just so sad....Dx though it's understanding if that's what you were trying to go for....
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This sounds like such an awesome beginning to an epic fic.
I would love it sooo sooo soooooooo much if you did either a sequel or a continuation of how sasuke broke away from the family and starts an open relationship with naruto.
The ending as it is now, is just so sad....Dx though it's understanding if that's what you were trying to go for....
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September 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ohmygod!! O_O
What sad and depressing ending! :(
Excellent story, btw.
Keep up the great work!
What sad and depressing ending! :(
Excellent story, btw.
Keep up the great work!
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September 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very nicely written! recital
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September 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow. That's so beautiful and yet so freaking sad I feel like a I'm going to cry! Poor Naruto. He just wants Sasuke to himself and he worked so hard to bring the raven back, just for him to be taken by Sakura. )sniffles) so sad. This was really really good. The emotion in it was very heart moving. I still want to cry! T_T
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September 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
That was the saddest story ever...and I mean ever. The emotion that you wrote into it was gripping...It was like I could feel the screams of 'I love you' between them. All I can say is well done.
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September 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
*is crying* Oh gods, this is so saaaaaaaaaaaaaad *sniffles* The smut was good but then your smut is always good. Still poor Naruto! Man this makes me wanna smack Sasuke around *mutters about stupid selfish bastards* I don't suppose there will ever be a sequal that ends in fluff will there? I mean unless Naruto gives up on Sasuke *makes yeah right face* it's pretty hopeless for a happy ending isn't it?