I thought that this story was the best but then you made it so other guys got in the action, that makes this story pure shit why would you ever do that? Now it's not even worth reading, should've kept it to just Naruto fucking and claiming girls all across the multiverse, btw why is there barely any titfucking? There was like maybe one or two mentions but then nothing, if I was him I would want constant titfucks, and another thing why force every girl to have massive tits? Don't get me wrong tits are awesome but having small tits are just as good as big ones. They can still do titfucks but then it would be most likely called a naizuri especially if it was a flat chest, variety never hurts
I dont usualy leave reviews . Hm started good but after 2 ch the only thing i can say is boring as fk , i know it sounds bad , but i liked your idea a lot sadly there is no diference ( all girls do the same thing in lemon , the only diference in the entire thing is the names , nothing beside that to get you hooked) also the way you write makes it a lil bad to read ( sakura says .hinata says . Tenten says each time gets realy annoying ) i might be a lil mean cause i realy liked the idea hope you can get this as advice and not the wrong way.
its been so long and i hope this fic is not abandoned.
hope to hear from you again soon.
may i suggest having them get to the monster girl quest world? though i think that if they do though that they shouldnt really bring many back but they have sex with several diffrent types with some of them being immune to the mind control and body altering just due something strange in their biology or something? girls i would recommend them taking back would be alice for naruto(maybe illias as well) and the 4 monster girl guards for the other guys?(mainly taking just these girls since most other monstergirls dont have actual names)
obviously you dont have to but it would be something intresting and diffrent you could do with the story.