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by momhuey8

schedule November 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
omg I hate that little pink haired thing.
person Sasha
schedule November 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
T^T POOR NARUTO!

I don't think the way you have the genjutsu conversations set up is confusing in any way. Though I'm really curious, is the genjutsu activated by the phrase "I will love you until the day you die"?

Anyway, great job! Can't wait for the next update!
schedule November 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Aww..


Although I am confused. Where the words in italics conversations that actually happened or were those doubts that Sakura was putting into his head?


Keep up the good work. ^^
schedule November 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ok i really don't like sakura in this
schedule November 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This part of the story is making me hate sakura more and more :/ she is an epic psycho
schedule November 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Whoa...intense here! Great job!
person Angel
schedule November 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Usually I read this last as I need a buffer after the heavyweight of Constellations, no more so after tonight, that wench really is unpalateable! You distracted me so much with the after action, the lessons Neji is learning re love and the price of it, Sasuke's immeasurable growth that I forgot to gripe over how easily the pink beajdef;kjadsf disposed of Itachi and is thwarting Sasuke and Naruto's suspcions.

I'm loving both stories, already it is unbelievable they had the same beginnings. Constellations worries me greatly. There is a nakedness to it of the human psyche that is hard to leave behind after reading, which is why I oft read 'All In' afterwards. Most intriguing is the twist you have on views, reinterpreting general concensus.

person kinai26
schedule October 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Sugoiiiii I begun to read "All in" first but now I´m following both stories. I must admit that I have come to hate your version of Sakura. I usually like her in the original manga.

I like the different take on the two stories, and at the moment I prefer "constallations" because Sakura isn´t scheming. I feel bad for Naruto though, who has a much darker life than first expected. Well anyway, I´d just want to say that I love this story and will follow it till the very end XD
schedule October 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
this is sweet. well sasuke and naruto anyway. it'd be sweeter if sakura wasn't such a bitch. well im off to read the other now
schedule October 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow. So far so good, but your plots moving too slowly. Constellations moves way faster. Both are good.