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awesome one shot. can you tell me if anyone has taken it up into a full story? My email is ChaosAlmighty@hotmail.com  Thanks.

Who is Naruto’s mother in this fic? With how you said KUSHINA found out about Madara almost at the cost of her life means she is alive, and I am guessing was the redhead at the beginning. She said Naruto looked like THEM meaning she is not his mother. If she is Naruto might go AWOL due to hers and Jiraiya’s actions.

If demons treat children so highly why would Kyuubi sexually dominate her step-daughter?

Will you write sequels to any of your fics?

Will you write a NaruAnko?

If you make a continuation will we see Yugito's first daughter? Think she could use some parental figures.

My little Nibi entrusted her kitten to her Kaasan
That makes it sound like Yugito is Nibi's mother.Get what you are trying to say but still was confused first time I read that.

Almost at the cost of her life, Kushina had made a most interesting discovery; that Madara Uchiha was the real force behind Akatsuki, and that he was masquerading as one of its lesser members while giving orders to the perceived leader.
so kushina abandoned Naruto? BAsed on how the red head was talking earlier I do not think she was kushina. Jiraiya said he (Naruto) looks just like them (his parents plural). If she was Kushina than she and Jiraiya have a lot to answer to: as Naruto was being beaten his mother and godfather were fucking.

Nibi had always been like a daughter to me
That she fucks regularly lol.

"Iruka-kun," She started, making the man wince at the sweetness in her voice. "Tell me about little Naruto." Iruka looked ready to refuse, having an inkling of what she had planned. "Tell me what I want to know, and I'll let you go back to your students for now."
That would have been a fun read.

This NEEDS a second chapter!!!!!

I've read all of your Icha Icha series and enjoyed them immensely. This one was a tad bit more dark than the others with Cloud's original social climate but still very enjoyable. The only thing that I had a problem with is that you didn't go into detail about saving Yugito's first child. I mean, you told of the horror story that was her life but you didn't say how her uncles saved her after they took over. I admit, you hinted at how that was one of the major changes that was supposed to happen but there was no explicit mention of it.

if this is indeed a one shot i'll cry


i'd say moar but everyone does :p

I hope that you will update again soon. Thanks.

Well, that was actually surprisingly well thought out. Kudos. At any rate, Yondaime may have been a seal master and the man who made Hiraishin but without those (Especially the Hiraishin), he was just another strong jounin. Hell, he only got a flee on sight warning because the hiraishin is basically impossible to counter. Otherwise, he'd probably be about as strong as Hatake or Gai; strong but no kage. Sarutobi master 1,000 jutsu by hard work and even in his old age could keep up with 2 kages and Orochimaru who was considered about kage level. The only reason he actually lost was cause he was a good 20 years past his prime.

I really enjoyed this story. It will well developed and didn't read like a oneshot at all. I'm intrigued about the relationship between Killer Bee and Yugito. I'd also love to read more about when Sasuke and Naruto finally come to head. Also, you need to bring Yugito and Naruto back together! Akatsuki have retrieved Gaara's biju... Yugito is next! Surely Kyuubi is not going sit idlely around while she could convince Naruto to try to do something about Niibi's host and mother to her grandkit!

There is so much wealth of story plots here that it would be a shame to see them go to waste.
Keep up the great work and I hope you continue with this. ^^

im going to guess that there are more chapters to this tail and i can hardly wait for them to come out i normaly only really read yaoi but damn your good