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December 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Interseting ^^ I can't wait for the meeting ^^
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December 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
lmao!!! i love these stories where if anyone decides to pursue Naruto they have to get not only Tsunade's approval but Iruka's as well. it's so funny to see them more scared of Iruka than Tsunade!
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November 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Fear not! For I have not abandoned thee! lol Sorry I have not reviewed recently, but I have just started a new job and that has been consuming the majority of my time. But I wanted to let you know that I am still reading and still adoring this story. Good luck with the other writing project and I will look foward to your next update. Ja ne
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October 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I am sooooo hoping that it is Genma! We know that it is not Kakashi because he has been in ANBU since he was a child and he is the only other person I can think of that would have a wolf mask. Plus, he is one of my favorite characters and so very sexy! Maybe he could give Naruto some comfort sex and Ibiki could get all jealous *gives puppy eyes*?
On a more serious note I am glad to hear that your mother is on the mend.
On a more serious note I am glad to hear that your mother is on the mend.
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September 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I am glad that Raidou is looking out for Naruto because he genuinely cares for him and not just out of a sense of duty. I am assuming that hospital is the word that was left out your explanantion concerning your mother and if that is the case then I hope everything is fine or will soon be so. Itachi is a new addition - does this mean he never left the village, Akatsuki mission is over, or some other explanation? I was just curious because Sasuke did run away to Orochimaru (meaning the massacre did occur and he was on a vengence kick) cause you said that Naruto dragged him back.
I realise that I am once again nitpicking and I apologize, but I was just a little confused. Waiting eagerly for the next installment!
I realise that I am once again nitpicking and I apologize, but I was just a little confused. Waiting eagerly for the next installment!
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September 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Even if they could not have made anything else stick- I get the impression that tampering with official paperwork in any capacity is a very punishable offense. Speaking of which... how would she have gotten access to those complaints? She would not have even been aware of them until she was having some form of conversation about her conduct. Even as Tsunade's apprentice she would not have had access to mission reports because she is a medical apprentice and not a hokage in training and I am assuming that complaints are not turned in at the hospital, but at the mission office or the hokage tower. Does this mean she has an accomplice or has she been manipulating/harming someone like Kotetsu, Izumo, or Iwaki (I do not know who all works in the mission office/hokage tower).
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August 21, 2011 at 12:00 AM
The temporary captain of team seven when Kakashi was incapacitated was named Yamato, not Yamamoto. Yamamoto is the name of the commander general of the 13 court squadrons in Bleach. Other than that I am loving this story! Cannot wait for the next chapter.
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August 4, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I do like this story quite a bit, and I REALLY want to see more. Because I like this story so much I decided to review with a bit of con-crit. I don't normally review unless the fic is worth it and I want to see a talented writer improve.
You have some grammar mistakes, as well as homophone issues (you use words that sound the same spoken but are spelled differently and have a different meaning.) You also have malapropism trouble (using the wrong word that sounds the same) like quite and quiet. A good Beta will catch all these and fix them for you. I've done it, many a writer has, because unless you sit there with a dictionary and thesaurus it will happen; so don't be discouraged.
You also have a plot conflict which I'm surprised no-one caught. Then again I did read the whole fic beginning to last chapter in one go. In an early chapter you have Tsunade dismissing the rookies and their teachers after she informed them of what Sakura had done to Naruto and his transformation, you even describe a few people's reactions. Later you go on to have Naruto reveal what happened to each team on his own, which is where you left off, but they should already know according to the events described in the fic. You may want to fix the conflict, I had a 'huh' moment there myself.
You have some grammar mistakes, as well as homophone issues (you use words that sound the same spoken but are spelled differently and have a different meaning.) You also have malapropism trouble (using the wrong word that sounds the same) like quite and quiet. A good Beta will catch all these and fix them for you. I've done it, many a writer has, because unless you sit there with a dictionary and thesaurus it will happen; so don't be discouraged.
You also have a plot conflict which I'm surprised no-one caught. Then again I did read the whole fic beginning to last chapter in one go. In an early chapter you have Tsunade dismissing the rookies and their teachers after she informed them of what Sakura had done to Naruto and his transformation, you even describe a few people's reactions. Later you go on to have Naruto reveal what happened to each team on his own, which is where you left off, but they should already know according to the events described in the fic. You may want to fix the conflict, I had a 'huh' moment there myself.
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June 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
i deff like! :D it's really interesting i want to find out just how crazy sakura is! :P
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May 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm, cute story so far, and a nice bit to get away from much too serious stories for once. Not a bad interpretation of Sakura either (though not canon compliant either, for that matter). Still, a fun read so far, and well worth the look. Update again soon, ja ne.