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June 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 55 so far I haven't really enjoyed reading your mature scenes. Most the time they feel tacked on and a bit tedious and I think I've only counted three different positions which makes them a little boring to read. However, in this chapter I felt that the mature content was an outgrowth of the events in the story rather than just being tacked on or a flimsy excuse. Perhaps I'm just misreading something and overall I'm thoroughly enjoying the story.
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June 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 56 Snuffers an inevitable outcome of the cat situation. I'm more than happy to have my imagination fail me there, but inevitably there is a part of me that only sees a difference in degrees with one crew over the others.
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June 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 61 personally I like the addition of Tayuya and I think, but cannot be sure I know where you're going with it. Pseudo-children? About the only other thing I can think of to say is that the title for this chapter Control probably wasn't the best because there is very little control throughout. Perhaps Training would have been more appropriate.
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May 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...someone's in trouble...
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May 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!!!!!!!!!! really that's all I have to say...like....OMG....I need more this is so addictive! And now more hyuga??? ( even though neji doesn't acknowledge himself as one).....can't wait for your next updateeeeeee!!!!!!
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May 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Urgh, that pervert was watching them having sex in his ship? Well, can't blame him, I woulda done the same thing! Possessive Naruto growling....does this mean we get to see him fuck Sasuke in the next chapter? Along with hot sexy descriptions? *puppy eyes* Pretty please?
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May 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
hi,
love the 3 some between Haku, Kisame & Itachi. I believe the only conclusion possible between them. Well, let see what happen with Neji. True, it was only a matter of time before the Hyuga manifested themselves. As for Naruto how long before he snap about the nursery. keep up with the good work.
read you later
love the 3 some between Haku, Kisame & Itachi. I believe the only conclusion possible between them. Well, let see what happen with Neji. True, it was only a matter of time before the Hyuga manifested themselves. As for Naruto how long before he snap about the nursery. keep up with the good work.
read you later
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May 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 53 when Naruto was talking about the kids it was cute in a sad way. As for the rest of the chapter well the question again of how old they are comes up. On a personal note I don't understand the temptation with the whole Gaara thing, but I'm weird.
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May 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 50 I like the idea of the female crew which brings in more canon characters in a believable way. As for the dustup between Kakashi and Iruka it seemed a bit strange to me. I really hadn't sensed much tension in the relationship prior to this chapter and simply being hit on doesn't seem like that big of a deal. I guess I am missing something.
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May 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 51 Temari joined a spaceship crew to seek help for her home planet, classic! Towards the towards the end of the conversation between Naruto and Neji I think you're a little too blunt when Naruto stated his problems were unsolvable. I know, I complain you're too subtle than I complain you're not subtle enough I'm just impossible to please I guess.
Not sure if you care for a chapter this old, but in the last paragraph you have the following possible misspelling Temari shugged.
Not sure if you care for a chapter this old, but in the last paragraph you have the following possible misspelling Temari shugged.