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February 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Then there was a small girl in front of him offering him a flower. He took it, thanked her and, after a moment’s hesitation, smiled. She smiled shyly in return, then turned and ran back towards her brothers. Sasuke eyes followed her and met Naruto’s gaze. Their eyes locked, space dark to sky blue, until the small girl reached her target and threw her arms about Naruto’s neck.
I found this passage so poignant and subtle that it brought tears to my eyes. It made me pity anyone who, through lack of experience, is not able to empathize with the overwhelming and heartwrenching emotions that are compressed in that single instance of eye contact between Naruto and Sasuke.
Is it possible that my interpretation is not your intent? But, I doubt that. Too well you illustrate the best of love - to give each other joy. What better in life than the perfect moment when a happy child presents you with a tiny treasure? Only the instant when you realize that the moment was a gift of love from one you cherish - this is the moment that stills your heart.
I found this passage so poignant and subtle that it brought tears to my eyes. It made me pity anyone who, through lack of experience, is not able to empathize with the overwhelming and heartwrenching emotions that are compressed in that single instance of eye contact between Naruto and Sasuke.
Is it possible that my interpretation is not your intent? But, I doubt that. Too well you illustrate the best of love - to give each other joy. What better in life than the perfect moment when a happy child presents you with a tiny treasure? Only the instant when you realize that the moment was a gift of love from one you cherish - this is the moment that stills your heart.
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February 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
GODS! I so love this story!
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February 23, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I love this story so much! I saw it thousands of times but the summary never attracted my attention. I was so stupid! This is the best fanfic ever!
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December 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
In chapter 46 you have a link to a song from Naruto. Ever since the episode I have loved this song but since I didn't know what it was called I couldn't find it. I thank you for the link, I found it now and have a copy. THANKS!!!!
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November 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Seriously your story is amazing! Ok maybe it's because I like space stories and Naruto. Nevertheless, I think you did a great job. Your character are rich and you give a lot of details. English is not my native language, however with your explanations I understood almost all of your story. I've read montains of fictions on ffnet and I think it's one my favorite. Sadly I can't really comment on your style because I won't dare with my own english level. I'm looking forward to read 'Tales in Tarrasade' and 'Iterations'. See ya'
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September 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
amazing, simply amazing. I wish this was a novel so i could rush out and buy it.
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July 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
The dialog with sasuke and naruto about the kits and babies was brilliant. i love the way you write naruto and sasuke's relationship. the kiba character is also very fascinating. you have so many different characters and personalities to write about and you do them all unique and individual and realistic- that's a lot of voices in your head. i enjoy reading- you're a good story teller. thanks for sharing.
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July 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
(Gaara discovered that laughing was infectious. He knew that he would pass out. His last thought was that he needed more experience of laughing.)-______you are doing great things with gaara's character- this was cute and funny and sweet.
You had written that kiba wasn't used to winning arguments with adults- but when you wrote about the holo-vids containing kiba and gaara- you wrote that kiba was older than gaara. kiba's argument was with gaara- he's older than gaara- so why didn't he think he could win. the littermates thing between them- doesn't that mean a group of species born at the same time by the same mother or set of incubators. kiba and gaara are different species and were not born at the same time- they were playmates for a while- so why can't gaara consider kiba for a mate. just wondering.
You had written that kiba wasn't used to winning arguments with adults- but when you wrote about the holo-vids containing kiba and gaara- you wrote that kiba was older than gaara. kiba's argument was with gaara- he's older than gaara- so why didn't he think he could win. the littermates thing between them- doesn't that mean a group of species born at the same time by the same mother or set of incubators. kiba and gaara are different species and were not born at the same time- they were playmates for a while- so why can't gaara consider kiba for a mate. just wondering.
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July 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Klennethon Darrent had given them the original;--
isn't this the man they can not trust. the man the secretly recorded them having sex and all other times they were in their room. how can he know it's the original. plus they didn't have it scanned for bugs or tracers or other recording/transmitting devices or explosives, etc....he had the chance to detain kabuto for sasuke and did not- had the nerve to tell them he saw him- the man that stole his brother and his mate's genetic material, etc..don't understand how naruto did not shred him.
this was a nice domestic chapter. loved the itachi/sasuke hug.
isn't this the man they can not trust. the man the secretly recorded them having sex and all other times they were in their room. how can he know it's the original. plus they didn't have it scanned for bugs or tracers or other recording/transmitting devices or explosives, etc....he had the chance to detain kabuto for sasuke and did not- had the nerve to tell them he saw him- the man that stole his brother and his mate's genetic material, etc..don't understand how naruto did not shred him.
this was a nice domestic chapter. loved the itachi/sasuke hug.
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July 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
“No, I would love to do it. What are you going to do? Train?”
“Training would be good,” Naruto answered.--
why does naruto get away with lying and going behind sasuke's back so much. and making unreasonable demands and getting his way-like claiming shika's and the entire crew's genetic material because he wanted children. sasuke went through a lot of trouble to make naruto's wish come true- made shika swear to not claim the child- then naruto tells shika which is his and asks for foregiveness----i notice he waited until nothing could be done- like maybe a day or 2 after fertilization so shika could have stopped it if he wanted. and sometimes naruto doesn't even say sorry- like when sasuke asked naruto how he could do that- naruto just said that it had to be done-it must be dealt with because he wanted shika to call him na-chan again---even his reason for making it right was selfish- because he wanted his guilt gone.
naruto is not the saint that the crew makes him out to be- he's quite manipulative
that's not a fault with the story or writing- just one reader's observation. i still find the story fascinating.
“Training would be good,” Naruto answered.--
why does naruto get away with lying and going behind sasuke's back so much. and making unreasonable demands and getting his way-like claiming shika's and the entire crew's genetic material because he wanted children. sasuke went through a lot of trouble to make naruto's wish come true- made shika swear to not claim the child- then naruto tells shika which is his and asks for foregiveness----i notice he waited until nothing could be done- like maybe a day or 2 after fertilization so shika could have stopped it if he wanted. and sometimes naruto doesn't even say sorry- like when sasuke asked naruto how he could do that- naruto just said that it had to be done-it must be dealt with because he wanted shika to call him na-chan again---even his reason for making it right was selfish- because he wanted his guilt gone.
naruto is not the saint that the crew makes him out to be- he's quite manipulative
that's not a fault with the story or writing- just one reader's observation. i still find the story fascinating.