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June 7, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 87 I think it's funny that you put a warning for lemons considering the site you're posting on. Anyway the problem with the nursery was resolved nicely though the use of the cards was a bit impersonal I think. The lemon wasn't bad.
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June 7, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 88 Jiraiya offered to walk the Centralite out. Haku, Neji and Shikamaru left. Kakaski went as if to follow but turned on the threshold.
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June 7, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 89 (finally) I've come to quite like these chapters where you touch base on everyone. This was the perfect scene to do it for and I found myself trying to figure out if there were any clues to what would happen next. Then it occurred to me that this could be the end, but as it's not listed as complete I'm guessing not. Right now, though, I'm not sure where you're heading.
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June 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 77 this review will be interesting to write. Throughout the story you use the F. word to describe sex and while you apparently had a discussion on this earlier I missed out on that. Still, in this chapter you had Itachi draw a line between the F-word and sex. I wonder if your intention was to comment on other characters actions through him or was this simply meant to state his opinion.
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June 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 78 happy endings all around? Probably a little late to point that out since I've pretty much been assuming that for a while now. The downside to such a thing is that it adds predictability. Predictability eliminates dramatic tension, but on the flip side it makes some readers happy.
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June 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 79 it would be interesting to see more of Konohamaru/Inari relationship. Not necessarily for the plot itself, but simply your views on certain matters that were commented on. Anyway I do like the subtle way revenge is being served. It's almost slightly more sadistic than simply killing him. Not quite what I've come to expect which is a pleasant surprise.
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June 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 80 your mature seen was pretty good. Also I like the conversation at the end where everyone was encouraging Kiba to explore his human side.
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June 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Can't wait for the kits to get here. =)
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June 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 81 Sasuke's realization that he had been spending too much time behind his desk is significant. The fact that he recognizes the leader must wear many hats is not always an easy realization. As for the meeting at the end I quite liked it. I wonder how Naruto would deal with the fact that some people will view such as an employer and not the head of the family.
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June 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I knew I was going to like this. It's not what I thought it was going to be but better. Spelling and grammar are good. Thanks for the read.