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Again, another great chapter. You are getting really great at weaving things together to balance description, plot, and dialog. Proud of you! :-D

The update was very good and deepen the plot enough that I'm really wanting an update asap! I've already said but love this story! And thanck you very much or reading my comment and also the replies are actually really cool and I have now decided to rate five stars and review!

Ps. Hurry up and right I wanna read MORE!!!
(Yah I like this story!)

Of course I would like future updates!

I loved this chapter. The backstory on Iruka/Kyuubi/Minato was pretty angsty, but I'm sure there's something more to it...I can't imagine Naruto actually doing anything like that. Even if his memories are wiped clean each time he's summoned, he's still essentially the same person (demon?) right?

And his insane protectiveness of Sasuke makes me squeal XD

But what's wrong with Sasuke? It's not fair of you to end the chapter like that...

Update soon!

Wow. Just wow. I'd've never thought of something liek this. So hopefully, you'll be updating soon? *big HUGE puppy dog eyes*

Love,
Kiki-Chan

There's more to the Kyuubi/Minato story than we know yet, yes? Seems Naruto gets the short end no matter what. *sigh* I'm thinking they'll have to reunite Sasuke and Kyuubi, for Sasuke's sake. I can't say I like this Kakashi much, but maybe I'm just easily irritated today.

Since Sasuke only gets one shot at a demon (plus he's already marked), and he managed to bond with Nine-tails, I can't see Hiashi letting this go unchallenged. Too much ego there.

So much to look forward to. ;)

Shweeee!!! What an action packed story! Not only did you lay down the action, but you added angst!! That scene was terribly heartbreaking!!! I felt for Kyuubi and Iruka D=!! Awe and I have no idea what's going to happen next! I thought it was kind of funny how Mikoto still had a baby monitor in their home, not so funny when Sasuke's screams started filtering through it =(

Lol had I awoken to read a really depressing chapter threatening to ruin my day, I would have either hunted for more fanfiction to cheer me up, or watch something cute and sweet like Chi's New Home to lighten the atmosphere xD

I can't wait for the next installment!! XOXOXs Kei-Chan!

I loved the fighting scene and the tender moments between Kakashi and Iruka! =)
Thanks for the update! ^^

The prologue is attention getting. I think that it sets up the story well. One thing though: I am not sure of the need for foot notes. These details seem like they could be worked into the story without referencing. While I do not mind scrolling up and down for more information, I do not think it adds to the impact of this story like say it would in a mocking story in scientific format nor do the footnotes impart highly technical information that cannot be gathered from the story. I think getting a more developed insight as a reader into what happened with Mikoto's Guardian would add to the story. In addition, I am not sure of the need to label changes of scene, such as "Back inside the dome". I think that the details inside each section provide enough information that the reader can easily transition without much help. Also, I am not sure that the use of the second-person/"you" perspective at the beginning. The details of the perspective seem mature and detailed for a ten-year old, especially when using comparisons to a lover's cry, although this may relate more to an older-than-ten (hopefully) audience.

Overall, the prologue is rich in details and plot foundation for a great platform towards a wonderful story. It was very easy to visualize and get involved in events as they occurred. The characterizations as well as the hints of types of bonds between pairings has my interest piqued. I am curious to see the details of pairings and in the possibilities of less-than-balanced relationships. Looking forward to the next part...

I feel... So happy for having read this. It was beautiful and interesting and extremely well written. As a guy, it's rare I find a story I like this much but you really hit the nail on the head with this. The detail is amazing and the posessiveness is adorable and hot at the same time. Please do continue this one, or I'll have to review it 80 times myself to meet your rubric. Thank you so much for this piece, I'm off to read your other works now because of it. Happy new year, and good luck with finding your second job. It's hard enough to balance one with school, I hope you find a way to manage. <3

Hi, loved the first chapter, and I'm also a fan of your story Broken. It's nice to see Iruka as the head teacher. It was surprising to know that Naruto had killed Minato. The whole summoning was beautifully described, can't wait to meet Neji's demon and to find out just how powerful Naruto is. I also wonder if Jiraiya is going to show, and probably he'll have Orochimaru as demon, well I wish so.