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"Maybe we have it hard because we're meant for epic loves."

this line was simply beautiful.

so much intensity this chapter.
it ended the way I expected, but didn't play out at all like I thought it might...
I love that you keep me surprised:)

poor boys - so in love and both so messed up! (but Naru/Sasuke are like death and taxes - no getting away from it)
adding Neji would make a hell of a threesome though:D

WOW! What a great end to the Chapter. Neji is right about almost everything!
Although it looks to me like Sasuke is intuitively, unconsciously loyal to Naruto, by only sleeping with him! (LOL Can't wait for the next chapter!) But Neji is right.. He does deserve better!

Now if only Sasuke would Realize he loves Naruto & say those 3 words or something passionate other than 'I want you' ugh
Sasuke can't seem to know what love is.. even if love bit him on the ass.. or in this case went up his ass!
Hopefully Sasuke will soon have an epiphany!

And I feel SO sorry for Naruto.. Feeling so guilty for sleeping with Sasuke when he shouldn't!! (GOD I love your writing!!)
Because of Sakura, both Naruto & Sasuke can't be together & and her parents are now miserable. T_T

I do not feel sorry for Sakura.. She doesn't deserve my pity. She made her own bed & now she has to sleep in it.. Litteraly
She is a Selfish, deceitful, scheming woman. And I hope all the terrible Shit she's done Hits the Fan!
Ino is a great best friend. But MAN she needs to grow bit more of a conscience.. O. K. a Lot More. (Again!! Love your writing!!)
LOL! Love the Bit with the Shoes!

P.S. I don't really review.. I usually only rate! but I had too I couldn't help it!
Let me know if my review was a pain in the ass or enjoyable! I'm a nooby at it!
( PLZ don't take anything I said the wrong way.. I am Not asking you to make any Changes! ) I am only Swooooning over your beautiful fic!!

Lol the new Naturo's nickname "ken doll" is genial XD
I simply love your story, honestly. The plot is so well structured and the characters.. are almost real!!

When I saw the title "Chicago" was totally my first thought. Cellophane is one of my favorite songs of that movie. Yet Sakara is definantly the sad clone but that's what she gets for stepping in to a Naruto/Sasuke yaoi story.

Sorry, not with you on the Sakura being invisible page. Lots of people see Sakura. Heck, even Sasuke sees Sakura- just not the way she wants him to see her. And that is unfortunately entirely her own fault and problem. She spelled out for him point blank how she felt and he made it clear in no uncertain terms that not only did he not return her feelings he did not welcome or accept them either. She knew he was giving her the stock rejection speech (that someone else wrote for him for God's sake) and if she did not get the hint from the fact that he did not even respect her enough to talk to her and let her down like a friend then nothing is ever going to crack that delusional shell.

There is an inherent selfishness in it. The fact that she never once considered Sasuke's feelings. She only saw that she wanted him and that somehow she could make him love her. The fact that she believed she could make Sasuke do anything just proves she knows nothing about the guy and that her 'love' for him is possessiveness and sheer ego on her part. Sasuke is the best and therefore she must have him- even to the point of selling out her own family.

She should get exactly what she wants and have Sasuke (and everyone else) really SEE her for exactly who and what she is. I will get off my rant now and say that I love your story so far and hope you update soon! Great work!

Pow! look at this dilemma with Naruto..talk about being f*cked four ways to sunday! Sasuke problems, Neji problems, Ino's angry and Sakura is pissed. How the hell is he going to get himself out of this rut? I feel so bad for him, but that's what happens when you're too SOFT with people. With Naruto you can't get softer than the best cotton in the world. Thanks for the update!!

Yeah, I got it. I was humming the song while reading.
I don't know whether to be annoyed with Sakura or sorry for her.
Little of both?
Looks like it's coming to a head either way.

aahah will naru tell her, what happen between sasu and him ? or will he be the kind person he is and go with neji ?? how will react sasu. to many questions !! i want answers!!!! see you soon

Its good that the reviews are giving you confidence in your work because I think its exceptional work! And yes, I did think of Chicago and by the end I saw Sakura in a sad clown suit. I must almost ad a huge OMFG hsjfhksjd!!!!! to the last sentence of this chapter!! Gah!!! How will Naruto ever explain this?! The tension is mounting and I am busting with anticipation!

Ahh! I don't know if you got that last review I did and I didn't copy it for some stupid reason... Anyway, if it didn't go through I just wanted to say, your story was so amazing and impacted me a LOT. Like I sat here, and totally rethought all my feelings about a man cheating on his wife and just thought, wow this story is so amazing. One of the best I ever read. (: The only little problem i had with it was uhm... semi-colons don't go with coordinating conjunctions. Like er...
" “No, we didn’t; and I hate doing anything partway.”"
semi-colons are used to separate two independent clauses without the use of a coordinating conjunction (and in this case) so just erase the and and it'll be perfect.
Also :
Hanging lights filled the huge tent and spilled outside; giving a soft, ethereal glow to the surrounding forest area as evening fell.
Release the semi-colon with a comma and it would be perfect. Remember semi-colons are there to put two separate clauses together, not to tack on descriptive phrases to complete sentences.
Anyway, besides that VERY MINOR DETAIL THAT YOUR WONDERFUL SELF should be able to fix very easily (because as you can tell, my respect for you is like MULTIPLE BOUNDS RIGHT NOW I LOVE YOUR WORK SO MUCH) xDD lsdnglksdng I LOVE THIS STORY SO FREAKING MUCH slkdnglskdng. anyway, thank you (: