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February 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Happy New Year! Great and much appreciated update .. and the story has skipped a year too! I'm not even going to bother to try to guess where this is going now - Naruto is obviously a busy man jetting all over the place, and things will only get worse if Shikamaru's prediction for the future is correct. Will Sasuke give it all up to follow him? So many ways this could go now, but I wait, as usual, patiently. Great work
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February 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Great to read a new chapter!
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February 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
ROFL Kakashi, you crazy son of a bitch! I'm going to erect a monument in your honor! I LOVE YOU!
Missing you around these parts, KKXXX. <3
Missing you around these parts, KKXXX. <3
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February 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
"why..., why has the Goddess forsook us?"
(weeps in front of shrine while clutching small bunny that is partially bald from being petted out of anxiety)
"Ahem..."
(shrine maiden spins and is confronted by the Goddess' sparkly magnificence)
"Oh...it's you."
(deadpans shrine maiden with a raised eyebrow that Sasuke would be proud of)
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"Go big, or go home"
YAY!!! I have a feeling Sasuke's heading to Paris:)
and look, we all know life get's in the way. if being busy at your job is the worst of it,
then good for you!
so thank you for this kind of wonderful.
PS - I like odd numbers ... my quirk ... just saying ... --- ... a bonus chapter wouldn't
go unappreciated ... just sayin'...
(weeps in front of shrine while clutching small bunny that is partially bald from being petted out of anxiety)
"Ahem..."
(shrine maiden spins and is confronted by the Goddess' sparkly magnificence)
"Oh...it's you."
(deadpans shrine maiden with a raised eyebrow that Sasuke would be proud of)
________________________________
"Go big, or go home"
YAY!!! I have a feeling Sasuke's heading to Paris:)
and look, we all know life get's in the way. if being busy at your job is the worst of it,
then good for you!
so thank you for this kind of wonderful.
PS - I like odd numbers ... my quirk ... just saying ... --- ... a bonus chapter wouldn't
go unappreciated ... just sayin'...
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February 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
oh and happy new year!
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February 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
ah you're back! yay! oh man, can't wait for the next chapter (which should be coming out soon since you had to split it the original one, righttt?)
keep going!
keep going!
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January 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
omg i think i'm going to cry! You can't keep doing this to me! They need to be together! Nothing is in the way, why can't you just make them happy and stop tearing apart my heart :,( I love the story so update soon okay? And please don't torcher me for too much longer i don't think my heart can take it. *hands over some cookies* (this is not a flame!) <3
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December 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Now, where should I start?
I wandered through the internet looking for a good piece of fanfiction to read after a long absence, because I guess I exhausted the list of memorable and great naruto slash and even the Harry Potter slash (and more fandom in a list too long to write.Lol) Or so I thought... There are probably more treasures out there but I have not found them yet, like "Torrid". And I'll have you know, I'm french, and I kind of exhausted the archieves in the french fandom too XD. Okay, maybe not, but you know what I mean...Well writen stories are such rare occurences. There are stories that have great plot but poor characterization, in desperate need of a beta(my english is not that great, so when I spot so many mistakes there's definitely something wrong), or underdevelopped plots...Etc.
Now why am I saying all this? This is to say that it was like a walk in the desert for me until I found an oasis. This fic. It hasn't happened for a long time in the multiple fandoms I'm part of. At first I just went on AFF, and then selected naruto/sasuke. The title caught my eyes immediately, and then I'm not going to lie, the number of reviews too(on AFF,it has so be something to get this much review), and then saw the summary.
I wasn't really convinced by the latter, but I decided to give it a shot. I was in a mood for anything. I confess the first chapters didn't really spark anything. Why is that? There were scenes I felt like something was majorly missing or it was a bit rushed. I thought, for an introduction it was quickly wanning my interest as a reader, because I thought that the way things were writen was a bit off. I re-read it again, and now that I know more of Naruto and Sasuke, it has more meaning and became brilliant, you know? Anyway, I was ready to abandon this when I read the memory of how Naruto and Sasuke became involved physically and the whole overused "this is just sex , no strings attached" idea. BUT, but, every author has their way of viewing a concept, an idea, even the most overused ones. They always find something to make it original. After years reading and writing fanfiction, I know that those little details are never indicator of the potential of a story. Not the only ones, at least.
How glad I was that I continued...Because you got me hooked from chapter four. Your writing style has A LOT to do with that, more so than the story itself. There is a certain way you phrase things, that fascinated me, and I found myself glued to each word.
One of the greatest things in your writing has to be the characterization. I attach so much importance to that, and at first, I thought it was not that great for a start. I mean, some people get me hooked from the start with the way they present their characters, (even if some always end up being disapointing after a few chapters) What intrigued me however, was the plot and your writing style(I'll never cease to say something about it through this review so prepare to get an overdose.)I said to myself everything is never perfect from first chapters. So back to the amazing characterization: I was blown away by the sheer genius of it. Your dialogue is one of the most realistic I encountered. I had a hard time to warm up to Sasuke's character at first. There was something about him I didn't like. He had the tendency to fade in the background in my mind, as I focused interely on Naruto. Maybe that was intended, I don't know. Naruto was struggling so much, and he was seating between two whairs. The way you handled him was heartbreaking, as he tried to cling and live or rather survive. I felt his desperation and I was depressed for him. I'm kind of a cynical person at times, and I have hard time relating to fictional characters when it's poorly writen, but your Naruto touched me. It's so funny, because there are situations in the fic that I've read so many times somewhere else, I usually just roll my eyes when I encounter them now and again, but here...There was a twist and an author personal touch that I couldn't ignore. Did I say that this is realistic?
I am sorry my review won't be much of a review however. It's like just a bunch of nonesense put together and a lot of fangirling over the writing style and characterization...Oh, and the dialogue, the plot: basically everything O_O. There are so much favorite quotes I might as while just quote every dialogue. One I particularly liked was Naruto's speech to Jirayia I believe. It was about love and loving a person even if one knows about their bad sides. It was in the earlier chapters, I have to look for it again.
About Sasuke...I really LOVED the way you handled his realtionship with his dad. It's funny how authors, no matter the fandom, write the patriarch as some cold hearted bastard who see their child as nothing but tools to get more heirs and live up to their last name's expectations. It's not necessarily bad to write that, but at least develop it and explain WHY is that person like that so the reader won't feel like it's just some gratuitious character bashing.(Like Lucius Malfoy. I cried in victory when J.K.R actually showed the fans that he was still a father and a human being despite the evil things he did. It does not justify his actions, but it was showing that he was human).I can count with my digits the number of times I actually cried while reading a fic. Sasuke throwing himself at Fugaku, like the little child he was still inside, the teenager, and the adult: Sasuke as a whole, who craved his father's love...That, my friend was a powerful scene. I cried, because eventhough Fugaku's character didn't appear that much, his character development was writen brilliantly and kind of undergound. The build up leading to that scene was great.
What is really noticeable in your writing, I think, is the fact that you can handle a character's development without writing said character's POV or even his direct antagonist. Few authors manage to do that. It's the details that make all the difference. The little mentions fleeting through secondary characters'POV.THAT contribute greatly to the main character's development without him being present. You cleverly used the side characters to highlight you main characters. For example, you didn't have do write tons of paragraphs about Naruto's influence on people, and cite them all and how he did what to change whomever...It was subtle, and well incorporated in the scenes, the minds of each people around him instead. Sai's drawings and his brief scene/interaction with Naruto showed how much Naruto could socialize with the oddest people. Even the mention of Gaara, though he doesn't appear, but the impressed tone used by other people over the fact that Naruto was friends with him spoke more volumes than a whole paragraph would have achieved.
Kiba was amazing in this. I like the way you showed your readers the way he realized something and went to Sasuke afterwards.Aww. I am a detail freak and I HATE fast paced stories(I love the sentence saying how Fugaku decided to reach out to Itachi too.That was a nice touch, and the scene with him and Mikoto just made it impossible to loathe the man). So this was like my heaven, my eldorado among others. The pace of this story and the amount of cleverly placed details killed me in a oh-so-good way. When I reached the 20th chapter I was craving for more. Of course, this fiction has a few flaws as nothing is perfect, but they're just little things that can be easily overlooked, entirely missed by some readers. Naruto's encounter with Sarutobi Hiruzen, while entertaining and a positive thing in Naruto's life felt a bit unrealistic. But that was just like a relief from all the angst going on, and he needs something positif in his life damit! lol. The things I liked the most were the way you "healed" the characters, each one of them, put on the right path by other people. I particularly appreciated when Sasuke was put in his place by Shizune. I like the fact that after Sasuke's confession, everything was not rainbows and flowers. I like the fact that Sakura has such a good friend and is being helped by others. I like that all of these characters are so believable. I LOVE your sense of Humor. My brother just called me insane when I laughed out loud at many scenes: the first Time Naruto fought with neji, the dialogue about the "gentle fist" was so hilarious I could barely breathe.
I have so much more to say, but I forgot all the things I promised myself I would put in this review when I'm done reading all 20 chapters. Lol. There are too many epic quotes and ideas. Also, I struggle a bit writing this because I want you to understand me well because I tend to have odd ways to phrase things. My mind is racing far too quickly and my poor fingers can't catch up. Unfortunately, I understand english 100% fine, but when it comes to actually expressing myself in this language, it's a bit difficult. I hope you'll overlook the typing mistakes and the grammar mistakes I know are scattered around this huge wall of text.
Frankly I have no clue what my intentions were when I started writing this but...I'm left speechless by the brilliance, genius of your writing. The last time I was this in love with a writing style in this fandom was when I read "Spiral falling" by Becca Amon and one or two others, but I can't remember which one was it again.I know I saved those stories though.
To conclude...Despite a rather average start, this is probably one of the most memorable piece of writing I've ever read. Not for the plot itself, but for the writing, the characters, the dialogue...There is something magical in your ink, or your pen. I have to read your other stories immediately! it's almost midnight where I am though, and the professor I have at first period tomorrow can't handle yawning people and faces that look too tired XD. I don't know how she expect college studets to behave. She has to know that people party twice more in college lol. Or just sleep late. Whatever, I talk too much. Bye!
Eien.
I wandered through the internet looking for a good piece of fanfiction to read after a long absence, because I guess I exhausted the list of memorable and great naruto slash and even the Harry Potter slash (and more fandom in a list too long to write.Lol) Or so I thought... There are probably more treasures out there but I have not found them yet, like "Torrid". And I'll have you know, I'm french, and I kind of exhausted the archieves in the french fandom too XD. Okay, maybe not, but you know what I mean...Well writen stories are such rare occurences. There are stories that have great plot but poor characterization, in desperate need of a beta(my english is not that great, so when I spot so many mistakes there's definitely something wrong), or underdevelopped plots...Etc.
Now why am I saying all this? This is to say that it was like a walk in the desert for me until I found an oasis. This fic. It hasn't happened for a long time in the multiple fandoms I'm part of. At first I just went on AFF, and then selected naruto/sasuke. The title caught my eyes immediately, and then I'm not going to lie, the number of reviews too(on AFF,it has so be something to get this much review), and then saw the summary.
I wasn't really convinced by the latter, but I decided to give it a shot. I was in a mood for anything. I confess the first chapters didn't really spark anything. Why is that? There were scenes I felt like something was majorly missing or it was a bit rushed. I thought, for an introduction it was quickly wanning my interest as a reader, because I thought that the way things were writen was a bit off. I re-read it again, and now that I know more of Naruto and Sasuke, it has more meaning and became brilliant, you know? Anyway, I was ready to abandon this when I read the memory of how Naruto and Sasuke became involved physically and the whole overused "this is just sex , no strings attached" idea. BUT, but, every author has their way of viewing a concept, an idea, even the most overused ones. They always find something to make it original. After years reading and writing fanfiction, I know that those little details are never indicator of the potential of a story. Not the only ones, at least.
How glad I was that I continued...Because you got me hooked from chapter four. Your writing style has A LOT to do with that, more so than the story itself. There is a certain way you phrase things, that fascinated me, and I found myself glued to each word.
One of the greatest things in your writing has to be the characterization. I attach so much importance to that, and at first, I thought it was not that great for a start. I mean, some people get me hooked from the start with the way they present their characters, (even if some always end up being disapointing after a few chapters) What intrigued me however, was the plot and your writing style(I'll never cease to say something about it through this review so prepare to get an overdose.)I said to myself everything is never perfect from first chapters. So back to the amazing characterization: I was blown away by the sheer genius of it. Your dialogue is one of the most realistic I encountered. I had a hard time to warm up to Sasuke's character at first. There was something about him I didn't like. He had the tendency to fade in the background in my mind, as I focused interely on Naruto. Maybe that was intended, I don't know. Naruto was struggling so much, and he was seating between two whairs. The way you handled him was heartbreaking, as he tried to cling and live or rather survive. I felt his desperation and I was depressed for him. I'm kind of a cynical person at times, and I have hard time relating to fictional characters when it's poorly writen, but your Naruto touched me. It's so funny, because there are situations in the fic that I've read so many times somewhere else, I usually just roll my eyes when I encounter them now and again, but here...There was a twist and an author personal touch that I couldn't ignore. Did I say that this is realistic?
I am sorry my review won't be much of a review however. It's like just a bunch of nonesense put together and a lot of fangirling over the writing style and characterization...Oh, and the dialogue, the plot: basically everything O_O. There are so much favorite quotes I might as while just quote every dialogue. One I particularly liked was Naruto's speech to Jirayia I believe. It was about love and loving a person even if one knows about their bad sides. It was in the earlier chapters, I have to look for it again.
About Sasuke...I really LOVED the way you handled his realtionship with his dad. It's funny how authors, no matter the fandom, write the patriarch as some cold hearted bastard who see their child as nothing but tools to get more heirs and live up to their last name's expectations. It's not necessarily bad to write that, but at least develop it and explain WHY is that person like that so the reader won't feel like it's just some gratuitious character bashing.(Like Lucius Malfoy. I cried in victory when J.K.R actually showed the fans that he was still a father and a human being despite the evil things he did. It does not justify his actions, but it was showing that he was human).I can count with my digits the number of times I actually cried while reading a fic. Sasuke throwing himself at Fugaku, like the little child he was still inside, the teenager, and the adult: Sasuke as a whole, who craved his father's love...That, my friend was a powerful scene. I cried, because eventhough Fugaku's character didn't appear that much, his character development was writen brilliantly and kind of undergound. The build up leading to that scene was great.
What is really noticeable in your writing, I think, is the fact that you can handle a character's development without writing said character's POV or even his direct antagonist. Few authors manage to do that. It's the details that make all the difference. The little mentions fleeting through secondary characters'POV.THAT contribute greatly to the main character's development without him being present. You cleverly used the side characters to highlight you main characters. For example, you didn't have do write tons of paragraphs about Naruto's influence on people, and cite them all and how he did what to change whomever...It was subtle, and well incorporated in the scenes, the minds of each people around him instead. Sai's drawings and his brief scene/interaction with Naruto showed how much Naruto could socialize with the oddest people. Even the mention of Gaara, though he doesn't appear, but the impressed tone used by other people over the fact that Naruto was friends with him spoke more volumes than a whole paragraph would have achieved.
Kiba was amazing in this. I like the way you showed your readers the way he realized something and went to Sasuke afterwards.Aww. I am a detail freak and I HATE fast paced stories(I love the sentence saying how Fugaku decided to reach out to Itachi too.That was a nice touch, and the scene with him and Mikoto just made it impossible to loathe the man). So this was like my heaven, my eldorado among others. The pace of this story and the amount of cleverly placed details killed me in a oh-so-good way. When I reached the 20th chapter I was craving for more. Of course, this fiction has a few flaws as nothing is perfect, but they're just little things that can be easily overlooked, entirely missed by some readers. Naruto's encounter with Sarutobi Hiruzen, while entertaining and a positive thing in Naruto's life felt a bit unrealistic. But that was just like a relief from all the angst going on, and he needs something positif in his life damit! lol. The things I liked the most were the way you "healed" the characters, each one of them, put on the right path by other people. I particularly appreciated when Sasuke was put in his place by Shizune. I like the fact that after Sasuke's confession, everything was not rainbows and flowers. I like the fact that Sakura has such a good friend and is being helped by others. I like that all of these characters are so believable. I LOVE your sense of Humor. My brother just called me insane when I laughed out loud at many scenes: the first Time Naruto fought with neji, the dialogue about the "gentle fist" was so hilarious I could barely breathe.
I have so much more to say, but I forgot all the things I promised myself I would put in this review when I'm done reading all 20 chapters. Lol. There are too many epic quotes and ideas. Also, I struggle a bit writing this because I want you to understand me well because I tend to have odd ways to phrase things. My mind is racing far too quickly and my poor fingers can't catch up. Unfortunately, I understand english 100% fine, but when it comes to actually expressing myself in this language, it's a bit difficult. I hope you'll overlook the typing mistakes and the grammar mistakes I know are scattered around this huge wall of text.
Frankly I have no clue what my intentions were when I started writing this but...I'm left speechless by the brilliance, genius of your writing. The last time I was this in love with a writing style in this fandom was when I read "Spiral falling" by Becca Amon and one or two others, but I can't remember which one was it again.I know I saved those stories though.
To conclude...Despite a rather average start, this is probably one of the most memorable piece of writing I've ever read. Not for the plot itself, but for the writing, the characters, the dialogue...There is something magical in your ink, or your pen. I have to read your other stories immediately! it's almost midnight where I am though, and the professor I have at first period tomorrow can't handle yawning people and faces that look too tired XD. I don't know how she expect college studets to behave. She has to know that people party twice more in college lol. Or just sleep late. Whatever, I talk too much. Bye!
Eien.
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October 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
"I mean I got it from ages six to sixteen, when cool, aloof and emotionally distant was hot. I know that a lot of women still love that; but we're smart, successful and self-assured, we're supposed to grow out of that phase. I keep trying to figure out why you never did."
"Naruto didn't either." Sakura pointed out defensively.
"Naruto and Sasuke are in a class of their own. Besides, Sasuke treated Naruto differently from anyone else from the get-go
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even after talking to naruto- sakura still doesn't get their love; or maybe love in general. ino said sakura loved sasuke for being cool, aloof, emotionally distant-and that she never got over it or outgrew it_ and sakura says that naruto didn't either....those aren't the reason naruto loves sasuke- that's why naruto's love worked and her worship didn't. she remained self important and delusional to the end. guilting naruto into giving her answers she had no right to unless she asked sasuke for them. after what she put naruto through- she should have signed the anullment papers at his apartment and left them with him to give to sasuke_ she didn't thank naruto for the truth and she didn't wish him well_ she tried to steal sasuke's life and happiness_ naruto should not forgive her- at least not yet- she hasn't even apologized for it. you did a good job making me hate sakura- this isn't me saying i don't like your story or writing- this is me saying i hated what sakura did and the problems she caused- you're writing made me care or not care for the characters- and when your writing can make your readers 'feel'_ that's a good thing. the story wouldn't have been nearly as satisfying without her character and the horrible things she did and her selfishness, etc...
the only thing i don't get is why naruto walked away from sasuke at the end of this chapter. sasuke risked giving up his clan and his job/financial security just so he could love and be with naruto. he's told his parents he loves naruto- he's told sakura he could only ever love 1 person and that happens to be naruto. what the hell more could naruto want or be waiting for. he gave sakura more peace of mind and closure and answers than he did sasuke_ and sakura's the person who tried to steal his lover, didn't thank him or apologize to him or wish him well. sasuke just gave naruto every assurance he needs; and you had him walk away- WTF
so yeah, that
"Naruto didn't either." Sakura pointed out defensively.
"Naruto and Sasuke are in a class of their own. Besides, Sasuke treated Naruto differently from anyone else from the get-go
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even after talking to naruto- sakura still doesn't get their love; or maybe love in general. ino said sakura loved sasuke for being cool, aloof, emotionally distant-and that she never got over it or outgrew it_ and sakura says that naruto didn't either....those aren't the reason naruto loves sasuke- that's why naruto's love worked and her worship didn't. she remained self important and delusional to the end. guilting naruto into giving her answers she had no right to unless she asked sasuke for them. after what she put naruto through- she should have signed the anullment papers at his apartment and left them with him to give to sasuke_ she didn't thank naruto for the truth and she didn't wish him well_ she tried to steal sasuke's life and happiness_ naruto should not forgive her- at least not yet- she hasn't even apologized for it. you did a good job making me hate sakura- this isn't me saying i don't like your story or writing- this is me saying i hated what sakura did and the problems she caused- you're writing made me care or not care for the characters- and when your writing can make your readers 'feel'_ that's a good thing. the story wouldn't have been nearly as satisfying without her character and the horrible things she did and her selfishness, etc...
the only thing i don't get is why naruto walked away from sasuke at the end of this chapter. sasuke risked giving up his clan and his job/financial security just so he could love and be with naruto. he's told his parents he loves naruto- he's told sakura he could only ever love 1 person and that happens to be naruto. what the hell more could naruto want or be waiting for. he gave sakura more peace of mind and closure and answers than he did sasuke_ and sakura's the person who tried to steal his lover, didn't thank him or apologize to him or wish him well. sasuke just gave naruto every assurance he needs; and you had him walk away- WTF
so yeah, that
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October 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
this is really remarkable stuff. the passion in these chapters is overwhelming- both good kind and bad.
the dialogs as always are excellent. you are a gifted story teller. it's obvious that a great deal of time/talent/effort go into these chapters. thanks so much for sharing with us.
the dialogs as always are excellent. you are a gifted story teller. it's obvious that a great deal of time/talent/effort go into these chapters. thanks so much for sharing with us.