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for Love From Hate

by LunaDiviner2009

schedule January 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ok. That was a great start. The sex scene needs some work, the wording used like he thrust into her clit, not something a man can thrust into. Here are a few that I have used or read: vagina, wet hole, womanhood, wet core, heated core, hot silken sheath and many others that are to crude t put here. You have a great start. I am curious about how he kept Kiba from hearing them. I will keep reading. I look forward to seeing how this story develops.