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February 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I loved this so much, like, it made my day. I wasn't expecting what Neji did and I thought it was fantastic. I'm thoroughly in love with this story.
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February 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I need a cigarette.
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February 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
As always great chapter! I'm reading Gaara's story too and I think I've read the one when Sasuke come's to, I think Break and is suppose to sub for Kiba, but ends up subbing for both Kiba and Naruto...is that part of this world?
I do love it when a good world comes together!!!
Post soon!!
P.S Neji/Shika are my #2 couple that I LOVE!!!!
I do love it when a good world comes together!!!
Post soon!!
P.S Neji/Shika are my #2 couple that I LOVE!!!!
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February 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Another fantastic chapter in a fantastic story. I did kinda lol at the thought of Neji kicking the shit out of Kabuto in a skirt though. Xd
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February 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is the other chapter I hadn't had the intense pleasure of reading. Oh, Kabuto--reaping what you've sown has never been so profoundly painful! Ibiki?! I would have guessed that sending Gaara into the room would be bad, but Ibiki, Naruto and Sasuke?! I don't even want to know.
LOL wouldn't it be funny if Neji were pulled over by a cop in that getup on his way to see Shikamaru?
Excellent chapter as always, DP. ^_^
LOL wouldn't it be funny if Neji were pulled over by a cop in that getup on his way to see Shikamaru?
Excellent chapter as always, DP. ^_^
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February 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. I like the relationships you are weaving and how you develop character. The more I read the more I like this cast, nicely done.
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February 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
So this is the chapter I was waiting for and it was not the "revenge" that I want to comment on here.
Where I should have been focusing on Neji, once again Sasuke and Naruto stole the show for me here. And it all goes back to Sasuke's statement about Naruto having control over his ass and not his mind. Oh how wrong could Sasuke be!
Your fics are like puzzle pieces and when one goes back to Breaking Point, which I am not sure where it fits in the timeline, and Breaking the Rules were I am sure is after Undercurrents, it is clear that Naruto does in fact OWN both Sasuke's ass and mind. I believe this assertation is perfectly clear in this chapter as well if one looks closely. And again, I give credit to you as a writer and the vivid images you create with your use of words. And once again, especially here, it's the "simple" gestures that make all the difference. Look at what occures with the knock on the door and Sasuke's immediate reaction. He moves away from Neji, where he was embracing another Dom and bows his head knowing his "master" is at the door. And what happens when his master enters? He is at his masters feet, eyes glazed, totally submissive, shivering, and holding onto the very instrument that Sasuke deemed his "most hated toy" in Breaking the Rules. Some can argue that Sasuke's reactions are merely trained physical ones and that the human body can be physically trained to have certain reactions to specific stimulus. Hmmm. I highly doubt that with Sasuke's genius brain that "that" scenario is valid here. His genius brain is "trained" to submit to "Master Naruto". It is just at this point in your world of Undercurrents that he has yet to realize that fact. Well, at least that is my interpretation of it. And that is the beauty of prose... it is up for the readers interpretation right?
Now, I am a bit surprised at Neji though, but then maybe not. Everyone does have a tendency to "underestimate" Naruto's intelligence and I guess with Sasuke's behavior in the limo and Neji's state of mind, he was a bit thrown. I just get frustrated when everyone believes that Sasuke always one-ups Naru. So thank you again for that brief window into their relationship and showing us that Sasuke's mind and ass are indeed collard and leashed!
Where I should have been focusing on Neji, once again Sasuke and Naruto stole the show for me here. And it all goes back to Sasuke's statement about Naruto having control over his ass and not his mind. Oh how wrong could Sasuke be!
Your fics are like puzzle pieces and when one goes back to Breaking Point, which I am not sure where it fits in the timeline, and Breaking the Rules were I am sure is after Undercurrents, it is clear that Naruto does in fact OWN both Sasuke's ass and mind. I believe this assertation is perfectly clear in this chapter as well if one looks closely. And again, I give credit to you as a writer and the vivid images you create with your use of words. And once again, especially here, it's the "simple" gestures that make all the difference. Look at what occures with the knock on the door and Sasuke's immediate reaction. He moves away from Neji, where he was embracing another Dom and bows his head knowing his "master" is at the door. And what happens when his master enters? He is at his masters feet, eyes glazed, totally submissive, shivering, and holding onto the very instrument that Sasuke deemed his "most hated toy" in Breaking the Rules. Some can argue that Sasuke's reactions are merely trained physical ones and that the human body can be physically trained to have certain reactions to specific stimulus. Hmmm. I highly doubt that with Sasuke's genius brain that "that" scenario is valid here. His genius brain is "trained" to submit to "Master Naruto". It is just at this point in your world of Undercurrents that he has yet to realize that fact. Well, at least that is my interpretation of it. And that is the beauty of prose... it is up for the readers interpretation right?
Now, I am a bit surprised at Neji though, but then maybe not. Everyone does have a tendency to "underestimate" Naruto's intelligence and I guess with Sasuke's behavior in the limo and Neji's state of mind, he was a bit thrown. I just get frustrated when everyone believes that Sasuke always one-ups Naru. So thank you again for that brief window into their relationship and showing us that Sasuke's mind and ass are indeed collard and leashed!
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February 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Haha, Naruto, Sasuke and Ibiki?
Oh boy, that Kabuto bastard is in for a treat! ...a treat indeed.
Anyways!
Aww, I love it how ''shaken'' Neji is. He needs his Shika so much that he didn't even change??
Oh yes, this is going to be awesome. But at the same time I worry how Shika would react if he found out exactly what Neji has been doing.
And more importantly WHO.. That didn't come off right, but you see what I mean?
And I have to say, the first time Neji stepped into his own car, in that particular outfit, I keep imagining him being pulled over by cops!!
But what I really want to see, is Shikamaru's reaction!
Keep writing and update soon again!
Oh boy, that Kabuto bastard is in for a treat! ...a treat indeed.
Anyways!
Aww, I love it how ''shaken'' Neji is. He needs his Shika so much that he didn't even change??
Oh yes, this is going to be awesome. But at the same time I worry how Shika would react if he found out exactly what Neji has been doing.
And more importantly WHO.. That didn't come off right, but you see what I mean?
And I have to say, the first time Neji stepped into his own car, in that particular outfit, I keep imagining him being pulled over by cops!!
But what I really want to see, is Shikamaru's reaction!
Keep writing and update soon again!
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February 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 15 was WOW :) I really didn't expect to target be Kabuto, I was surprised... but then in manga... well... he really likes to torment people but more mentally than physically,... and I really didn't expect Ibiki or Naruto to show up at all, and I really didn't expect that Naruto and Sasuke would interrogate Kabuto also,...
I mean Naruto doesn't seem like that type at all to interrogate and torment people... I could imagine some other person like Gaara or Kiba or someone else to do so but Naruto and Sasuke who also doesn't seem a type to torment and interrogate at all... I am really sceptic about it.
But nevertheless your talent of writing and portraying story is amazing without every doubt :)
I enjoy every chapter :)
I mean Naruto doesn't seem like that type at all to interrogate and torment people... I could imagine some other person like Gaara or Kiba or someone else to do so but Naruto and Sasuke who also doesn't seem a type to torment and interrogate at all... I am really sceptic about it.
But nevertheless your talent of writing and portraying story is amazing without every doubt :)
I enjoy every chapter :)
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February 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Prima-donna Sasuke!! Oh man, I loved this chapter! And I love a submissive Neji although he's quite the seme in this story but damn, the boy is fiiine in a skirt. Too bad it's just pretend, lol. ;p Can't wait to see Kabuto get his ass kicked! Ooh and I would love to see more of Naruto and his slutty Sasuke!