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February 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
You really adore to torture us slowly... :)
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February 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ughhhh, I wish I could have gotten the chance to review chapter 10 before you posted chapter 11, but since you posted the "smut" in two parts I will review those together.
I really believe that I can honestly say that what occured in chapter 10 was one of, if not the HOTTEST scenes I have ever read. I cannot even call it "smut" because in my mind it was not smut. It was more of a deeper connection which involves trust on both parts of these men. I honestly felt like a "voyeur" being on the outskirts allowed in and almost out of place so to speak because of the actual act. As sensual as it was, Shikamaru turning and giving Neji, the driver, a birdseye view of his acts was such an act of trust for him. I felt like I should not have been there for it because it was such a private moment.
And again, Neji trusting that Shikamaru would obey his every command without question even after learning a bit about his experiences. I also love Neji's control and his inner dialogue with himself has just the right bit of humor, which once again brings humaness to him. You let us know how conflicted he is with wanting to literally bend Shikamaru over the nearest surface and go to town, but his love for Shika prevents him form doing such.
Please do not get me wrong. The actual acts themselves were so beyond hot, and I think this was the hottest I've EVER seen "uke" Shikamaru in solo action. The hottest moment for me was when his hand shot up to the roof of the car. Just like with the kiss in the club with Neji, such a small gesture, but you have such an ability to take the most "normal", "insignificant", "small", and possibly the most easiest gestures and movements that we take for granted and turn them into the biggest and most significant and sensual "things" depending upon the context in which you set them.
Chapter 10 is my favorite chapter so far.
I really believe that I can honestly say that what occured in chapter 10 was one of, if not the HOTTEST scenes I have ever read. I cannot even call it "smut" because in my mind it was not smut. It was more of a deeper connection which involves trust on both parts of these men. I honestly felt like a "voyeur" being on the outskirts allowed in and almost out of place so to speak because of the actual act. As sensual as it was, Shikamaru turning and giving Neji, the driver, a birdseye view of his acts was such an act of trust for him. I felt like I should not have been there for it because it was such a private moment.
And again, Neji trusting that Shikamaru would obey his every command without question even after learning a bit about his experiences. I also love Neji's control and his inner dialogue with himself has just the right bit of humor, which once again brings humaness to him. You let us know how conflicted he is with wanting to literally bend Shikamaru over the nearest surface and go to town, but his love for Shika prevents him form doing such.
Please do not get me wrong. The actual acts themselves were so beyond hot, and I think this was the hottest I've EVER seen "uke" Shikamaru in solo action. The hottest moment for me was when his hand shot up to the roof of the car. Just like with the kiss in the club with Neji, such a small gesture, but you have such an ability to take the most "normal", "insignificant", "small", and possibly the most easiest gestures and movements that we take for granted and turn them into the biggest and most significant and sensual "things" depending upon the context in which you set them.
Chapter 10 is my favorite chapter so far.
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February 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Damn, I don't remember ever being this thirsty...
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January 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was brilliant, to say the least. Especially the part when Neji kissed Shikamaru's hand. I love it. I love it a lot.
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January 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Need. More. Please update soon.
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January 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is nicely written. You had a great set up and even at ch. 6 there is still a strong tension. Nice work.
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January 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Look, Neji was so good in that last chapter I was ready to get down on MY knees!
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January 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
You are killing me!!!!!! I can't wait for next chapter and I just adore and love when you potray exterior or interior of places, clubs, houses ...
Ah, don't make such cliffhangers... Write soon.
Ah, don't make such cliffhangers... Write soon.
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January 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh my! This is just getting hotter and hotter! And more interesting too.
And Shikamaru is now more.. how should I say it.. He allowes more? Yeah. And that good!
The dancing (humping more like it) with Neji, Shika and Kiba was so sexy!
I'm actually more of a sub!Neji fan, but this is just too good to pass.
The plot is great and you have written the characters so well!
Certainly not porn without plot. :D
I hope you keep writing and updating like you always do: fast!
And Shikamaru is now more.. how should I say it.. He allowes more? Yeah. And that good!
The dancing (humping more like it) with Neji, Shika and Kiba was so sexy!
I'm actually more of a sub!Neji fan, but this is just too good to pass.
The plot is great and you have written the characters so well!
Certainly not porn without plot. :D
I hope you keep writing and updating like you always do: fast!
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January 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
you sure know how to tease us along . . . ;)
waiting breathelessly
waiting breathelessly