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March 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I can just imagine how uncomfortable Gaara must have felt to be under Kiba's scrutiny >.> Too see all that sexiness staring back at you is quite unnerving lol
I'm loving Gaara's development. Keep it up :)
I'm loving Gaara's development. Keep it up :)
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March 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
oooo I wanna know whats gonna happen! I can't wait for the next chapter
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March 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 7 amazing. This will be more hunting than seducing :)
I love how Gaara reacted to Kiba.
I love how Gaara reacted to Kiba.
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March 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
That Kiba's total bastard. He's making sex eyes at Gaara while Itachi is blowing him. Itachi?! WTFH did he have to bribe or to kill to make that happen? That was some show he put on for Gaara; now what is Gaara going to do about that? Since he can't get with Naruto or Neji, then who? What? I can barely wait to find out!
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March 7, 2010 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!! plz, plz, plz update soon. I really want to read more relationship development between Kiba and Gaara. I can't wait to read how Kiba break Gaara out of the funk he in right now. It was interesting how you make all the dom in the cannon into sub, the most interesting was Itachi. OMG Gaara, I love him so much. Update soon.
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February 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm,
After reading this chapter I had to wait a bit to review. I needed to process everything I read because honestly, my mind was going a-mile-a-minute and by the end of chapter, I was so emotionally and mentally drained that all I could come up with was HOLY S***!
And what brought me to such an ineloquent response you many ask; KIBA!
Let me explain.
Usually I am not a fan of this character and it is not because of his "portrayal" in the anime/manga, but in fanfiction. Usually, Kiba is depicted as this immature, competitive, dense, unattractive, loud, and overly irritating arrogant character where the "dog" analogy is overly done to the point where it becomes cliche' or dead.
Now, with that being said, every author has license to portray his or her characters the way they choose within their fics as the characters need to adopt certain qualities and personalities in order to serve whatever purpose the author needs them to within the plot of the story.
This is why I believe, even with fanfiction, characters should change from story to story, plot to plot, unless one is writing characters within the same "universe".
Now, what is my point as I seem to have gone off on a tangent? It is simple.
Your portrayal of Kiba in this fic is simply, for lack of a better term, MIND BLOWING. He is EVERYTHING he NEEDS to be for this fic; cock-sure/arrogant, sexy, slightly masochistic, risky, mature, and such a glorious bastard (sorry for that cliche, but it just suits him).
Now, at first glance, some of this description seems to fit the above one where I stated that I was not a fan of Kiba. Hmmm, let me offer you further explanation. The reason why "This" works for Kiba in your fic is because of you placing him with Gaara.
Wouldn't Kiba need to be all of these things: arrogant, cocky, masochistic, and risky if he is even going to garner the ATTENTION of a "gang member, murderer, and child too wise for his years". And that's just from the summary. Let's not even delve into the fic itself where the reader actually gets into Gaara's mind and actions!
Now, just look at the chapter itself with regards to Itachi and Neji and this is where I love how all your fics knit together so beautifully and artfully if one pays close attention. Kiba masters Itachi. If Itachi is ANYTHING like Sasuke, Kiba is the man to do this. Do I even need to get into Kiba and his purpose in the plot regarding Sasu and Naru in Breaking the Rules? And if one looks closely in this chapter in R&B also, they will see the effect that Kiba has on our Prince Hyuuga. He makes Neji shiver just with his words for a sub! Need I say more? Shall I take it back to what he did to both Neji and Shika at Bliss in Undercurrents?
Kiba serves his purpose in all of your stories. It goes back to what I said previously. I hope this all makes sense as it may have gotten jumbled along the way. However my point here is a simple one:
Kiba is brilliant!
On a side note: Il est facile de critiquer le travail difficile d'un auteur qui se cache derrière un rideau de fer quand on sait qu'ils ne peuvent pas être réprimandé.
After reading this chapter I had to wait a bit to review. I needed to process everything I read because honestly, my mind was going a-mile-a-minute and by the end of chapter, I was so emotionally and mentally drained that all I could come up with was HOLY S***!
And what brought me to such an ineloquent response you many ask; KIBA!
Let me explain.
Usually I am not a fan of this character and it is not because of his "portrayal" in the anime/manga, but in fanfiction. Usually, Kiba is depicted as this immature, competitive, dense, unattractive, loud, and overly irritating arrogant character where the "dog" analogy is overly done to the point where it becomes cliche' or dead.
Now, with that being said, every author has license to portray his or her characters the way they choose within their fics as the characters need to adopt certain qualities and personalities in order to serve whatever purpose the author needs them to within the plot of the story.
This is why I believe, even with fanfiction, characters should change from story to story, plot to plot, unless one is writing characters within the same "universe".
Now, what is my point as I seem to have gone off on a tangent? It is simple.
Your portrayal of Kiba in this fic is simply, for lack of a better term, MIND BLOWING. He is EVERYTHING he NEEDS to be for this fic; cock-sure/arrogant, sexy, slightly masochistic, risky, mature, and such a glorious bastard (sorry for that cliche, but it just suits him).
Now, at first glance, some of this description seems to fit the above one where I stated that I was not a fan of Kiba. Hmmm, let me offer you further explanation. The reason why "This" works for Kiba in your fic is because of you placing him with Gaara.
Wouldn't Kiba need to be all of these things: arrogant, cocky, masochistic, and risky if he is even going to garner the ATTENTION of a "gang member, murderer, and child too wise for his years". And that's just from the summary. Let's not even delve into the fic itself where the reader actually gets into Gaara's mind and actions!
Now, just look at the chapter itself with regards to Itachi and Neji and this is where I love how all your fics knit together so beautifully and artfully if one pays close attention. Kiba masters Itachi. If Itachi is ANYTHING like Sasuke, Kiba is the man to do this. Do I even need to get into Kiba and his purpose in the plot regarding Sasu and Naru in Breaking the Rules? And if one looks closely in this chapter in R&B also, they will see the effect that Kiba has on our Prince Hyuuga. He makes Neji shiver just with his words for a sub! Need I say more? Shall I take it back to what he did to both Neji and Shika at Bliss in Undercurrents?
Kiba serves his purpose in all of your stories. It goes back to what I said previously. I hope this all makes sense as it may have gotten jumbled along the way. However my point here is a simple one:
Kiba is brilliant!
On a side note: Il est facile de critiquer le travail difficile d'un auteur qui se cache derrière un rideau de fer quand on sait qu'ils ne peuvent pas être réprimandé.
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February 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Damn this story is sexy! Oddly enough the chapter I liked best so far was the one with the radio show. The little glimpses into the daily life of people connected by the common thread of the show- interestingly done.
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February 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ooh this is soo good and the interconnectivity with Undercurrents is great. And the way Gaara's character is developing is delicious. The fact that it might become a Kiba/Gaara is way great and something I haven't read before, so I'm looking forward to the next update to this one. Keep up the great work and update soons!
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February 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I read chapter 6 again, and officially Kiba irritates me... he is irritating, cocky and annoying even in manga but here I really can't stand him...
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February 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I have to say that I really enjoy and love Gaara how you potrayed and described him... but ... I just can't help myself... and I must say that Kiba is really annoying to me in this fic... So cocky and... well... really annoying... Also, I am used to fics in which Itachi is the one in control and Kiba is his target so ... I just can't see Kiba as someone who controls Itachi and Itachi who submits to him... It seems so... so... hm... different? I am used to see Itachi as a sub to Kisame and Pain but not to Kiba... That was really unexpected... :) You really have a talent to mix different kinds of people.