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February 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I still love this story a bunch. I love how it intertwines with Undercurrents. <3
Please update soon because I am hooked.
Please update soon because I am hooked.
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February 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
There are really no words for how much I love your fiction and Gaara's story is no different. I'm eagerly awaiting each wonderful chapter and it's making me want to draw him like you wouldn't believe. I've read many stories since I first found this site around 2004-2005 and though many have been great very few have inspired me enough to want to bring a little life to them by drawing the characters. Up until now there has only been one that has inspired me that much.
Keep up the great work and should I manage to get that drawing done, I will be sure to let you know.
Keep up the great work and should I manage to get that drawing done, I will be sure to let you know.
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February 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I like this story so far. It's very angsty.
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February 1, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hmmmm
I didn't get a chance to review this when you first posted.
I don't know if this counts as a review, but I will tell you what I "saw" when I read chapter 1
I saw boys in a vintage car. This live picture was in black and white. There was an occassional splotch of red and electric blue. The boys were dressed in black and white horizontal stripped shirts. I guess I've been watching too many Quintin Tarrentino movies. Anyway, the funny thing is, I heard music. Almost a symphony of melodies. It was all instrumental. The reasons being..... Your words were almost rythmic and melodic in this chapter. I even went back and read it a second time out loud and there was a definite rythym. Whether you meant this or not, it was there. Chapter one was definately poetic, poetic chaos because of the plot in that chapter. The even scarier thing was my earlier observation of Gaara from the scene in Undercurrents. Though COMPLETEY different from the character in Clockwork, there is a scene in the movie where Alex and his boys are flying "high" in a stolen vintage car living it up! I freaked myself out by making that connection having never read your story and then reading it.
You have such an amazing way with words and although I am not a fan of Gaara, you've made his story here an interesting one, such that I look forward to seeing where this goes.
Chapter 2 had such a different tone. The melody was gone, but the tone was none the less dramatic. I was a bit sad that Paint died. And Gaara inheriting money was a bit surprising as also his involvement with Haze????? I can't wait to see how he gets to know the boys and whether or not you follow through with the manga "cannon" relationship with Naru. I also cannot wait to see who you pair him with, since most of his usual pairings are taken already. At least the ones that I've seen, but then again, I don't usually follow his stories too much.
I truly hope this story gets more of a following in the future. And I hope it doesn't take "smut" to get the reviewers to come out of the woodworks. That is just tragedy to me!
I look forward to more!
I didn't get a chance to review this when you first posted.
I don't know if this counts as a review, but I will tell you what I "saw" when I read chapter 1
I saw boys in a vintage car. This live picture was in black and white. There was an occassional splotch of red and electric blue. The boys were dressed in black and white horizontal stripped shirts. I guess I've been watching too many Quintin Tarrentino movies. Anyway, the funny thing is, I heard music. Almost a symphony of melodies. It was all instrumental. The reasons being..... Your words were almost rythmic and melodic in this chapter. I even went back and read it a second time out loud and there was a definite rythym. Whether you meant this or not, it was there. Chapter one was definately poetic, poetic chaos because of the plot in that chapter. The even scarier thing was my earlier observation of Gaara from the scene in Undercurrents. Though COMPLETEY different from the character in Clockwork, there is a scene in the movie where Alex and his boys are flying "high" in a stolen vintage car living it up! I freaked myself out by making that connection having never read your story and then reading it.
You have such an amazing way with words and although I am not a fan of Gaara, you've made his story here an interesting one, such that I look forward to seeing where this goes.
Chapter 2 had such a different tone. The melody was gone, but the tone was none the less dramatic. I was a bit sad that Paint died. And Gaara inheriting money was a bit surprising as also his involvement with Haze????? I can't wait to see how he gets to know the boys and whether or not you follow through with the manga "cannon" relationship with Naru. I also cannot wait to see who you pair him with, since most of his usual pairings are taken already. At least the ones that I've seen, but then again, I don't usually follow his stories too much.
I truly hope this story gets more of a following in the future. And I hope it doesn't take "smut" to get the reviewers to come out of the woodworks. That is just tragedy to me!
I look forward to more!
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January 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow, really intriguing start... I can't wait to see what will happen next.
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January 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
already read in on Ygal but i have to give it some love on here hope to see a second chapter soon