rate_review Reviews

This is a really great beginning!!!! I must say that I normally don't read het but this story is great non the less!!!! It is a bit confiusing with all the yinchuriki but I think it will explain itself later!!!! I really hope to see more of this story soon!!!! See you again!!!

Well done story and all, but it'd be considerably easier to read if you left a space between each paragraph. As it is, it's rather difficult to read without losing my place.

I thought I'd review here too. Awesome stuff.

DAMN these lemons are HOT keep up the great story man both here and on FF.net!!!!!

Its a great story.. whats you profile name at FF.net? I want to read the other version if possible... :DD

I love the story and the Lemons are awesome as well I can't wait for more of the story also.

Awesome lemon, though I wouldn't mind one without all the interuptions, just straight wild sex since the history and explantion bits kind of distracts from the lemon by breaking the pace up. But one negative note: it's cum, not come.

excellent story. It really is great to see one where he goes to another universe and is actually well written. I have read a couple that was just all about the sex, and the plot was so full of holes and poorly written that the whole story wasn't worth the effort of reading, yet this one seems like it's going to be the perfect combination for and Adult story. Excellent plotline with well written Lemons to help with the characters relationships. Oh and on a seperate note you said in the A.N at the begining that this is a Adult version of a story you have posted somewhere else. I'd greatly appreciate it if you could send me a link to this story. I'll be waiting for the next chapter.

P.S. Please no more blue balling. That was almost painful to read.

awesome story i totaly argee with dragonsclaw
can't wait for more chapters
it can get pretty boring just reading lemons with no plot
keep up the good work