rate_review Reviews

First off, I loved this story! I just wanted to point out something that I have been seeing a lot and has been bugging me for a while. In the story you wrote that Naruto was 'moaning and withering beneath him'. I think what has happened is that people read other fanfics, saw a word, figured out what it meant from the context in which it was used and decided to use it themselves. Unfortunately, whomever wrote the original story was wrong. I think the word that was intended by the original author was 'writhing' which means to twist or move in a contorted motion (aka squirm). When something is 'withering' it means that it is drying up and dying. For example flowers wither and die. It is a very simple and, unfortunatly, common mistake. If it was just a simple case of misspelling then I probably would have ignored it, but in this case it is the wrong word altogether and totally changes the meaning of, not only the sentence, but also the entire awesome encounter that you wrote.

Once again, I loved you story and I will apologize for my excessive babbling and the fact that the rant had been building up for a while and you just happened to catch it. Please keep it up as I have read several of your fics and have adored them.

yay an otakon reference!!!

loved it!