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Hey, I felt like this is the first fan fiction I've read in a while that doesn't feel like it was written by a 13 year old.

Well done.

I love the sexual tension.

a year i leave for a year do to family and you dont update. whats wrong you know you can email me tho i have a new one for you.

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talk to me hun

I died when i reaslised there was no chapter 5. lol PLEASE UPDATE!

Okay so I'm def new to aff and I must say that I am in love with this story an u can bet that I will be checking out the others that you have written. Keep up the amazing work and I will def be watching this one :)

Good story. Great plot, but I would suggest a beta or if you have one already, please get another one. Some of the sentences need commas or need to end with periods. It is creating run-on sentences and ruining the flow. This story would read a lot better if it was proofread.

I can't stop chuckling to myself. I love the banter between Naruto and Sasuke and how the Uchiha loves to get under the blonde's skin despite Haku warning him about his temper in an earlier chapter. It's obvious who that silver haired man was but I was just as disapopinted as Naruto that he didn't get to kick Kabuto's ass. The fact that he yelled out his attentions as he tried to attack him outside the store was hilarious. It was also cute and made me smile the first time Kabuto appeared and Naruto suddenly got possesive of Naruto with Sasuke being more amused then annoyed. I just couldn't help picturing Naruto as like this cute guard dog glaring at anything that even twitched towards his master.

Oh, oh I'm really curious to find out about Sasuke's past and if I haven't reviewed this before than shame on me. I really do love this story. It's so gritty and raw without being so angsty I need to reach for a tissue. I guess there is an honesty and rawness about the lives that revolve around the strip club, that family that is formed among these unlikely people. The fact that they come here to make a new start and just live despite their means is intriguing and so.. so real.

I love the Kiba/Naruto duo as bouncers. They just feed off each others energy when they are together and it makes me want to be one of the boys in a way. Or at least chuckle to myself and shake my head while they gleefully toss a stupid customer out.

Oh is Zabuza the boyfriend? I bet it is Zabuza and poor Haku. I think its cute that even though Haku's older, Naruto feels like Haku is like his little brother. I can't to see more of the familial relationships and comraderie forming in this most unlikely place.

I want to throw one of Sasuke's tomatoes at Jiraiya when that old perve interrupted Naruto's 'hostile takeover'. It was just getting to the good point and then bam... reality steps in and dashes all of our hopes. But I'll wait patiently to see what happens next. Hopefully it won't be too long and I know it'll definetly will be sure to be a good read.

Well tata for now XP

P.S. - Groppy Naruto is always a good thing, whether he's doing it while he's awake or not.XP

OMG!! Awsome! I have been waiting for so long. =) Awsome work!

You don't tell a man like Naruto that he couldn't step up to the plate and not expect him to -- I don't know -- step up to the plate.

Sasuke's ass is grass.

yosh!!!!!! happy day! can't wait till they reach home!!

i love prissy hard up sasuke.....poor thing waking up being gropped, and left hard....i would have kicked naruto out of bed too....can't wait for more.