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person telynaayuri
schedule October 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Pap loves to-chan too. i love the end of this chapter. its good that they got that instead of them thinking they were fighting/hurting each other.
person SidonieStarr
schedule October 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
There is so much to admire about this story and your AU, I hardly know where to start. In Sasuke, you have, over time, created a compelling but human leader. The "Battle" chapter in "In the Cold of Space..." is one of my favorites and it's good to have confirmation in recent chapters the Sasuke we saw there wasn't a one-off. (In "Battle", I wasn't sure why, given all the technology, there was a need for a gunner [Naruto] but I'm completely willing to suspend disbelief on that one. And yes, I do remember [barely] that it's just a story.)

The world the characters inhabit is rich and detailed: the spacer culture, Uchiha mores, hybrids, the (science fiction) communications and travel technology, the importance of economics. The desire of most of Uchiha to preserve the innocence of the few who do not have abusive backgrounds,is interesting. With respect to female characters, well, this is a slash story and that's really what we want to read about. Nonetheless, for most slash authors (and I am not one) I think the authors' own self-respect requires that they acknowledge the importance of women, but they are usually two-dimensional. Tayuya is an exception and I can't wait to see what happens with her. Thanks. Sidonie
person Midnight Essence
schedule October 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ooooh... Out of the mouths of children... Lol!

But the drama is building and the battle is looming. I can't wait to see more.
person v
schedule October 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
The suspense of this situation just keeps building...I'm on the absolute edge of my seat..although I have no idea whats going to happen and thats kinda freakin me out..I hope no one gets hurt, again though i'll trust in your vision and just hope you won't make me cry :) also, loved the little snippet about how the children think of their To-chan and Papa, so heartwarming.
schedule October 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
so torn. i want to wait till i know how the raid goes but at the same time i find myself here reading the latest offering before i can help myself.... damn adictive stories. ^^ *mock shakes fist.
schedule October 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
"Papa loves To-chan too."

LOL who wouldn't?
person roro237
schedule October 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
OMG! That was intense and just wOw!! I'm ready to put on my battle gear after that:) What the children thought was the sweetest. I loved it!!! You know what I love so much still about the saga is no matter what the love Naruto and Sasuke share is so never ending:) It's like their together power. What I'm getting at is I understand why it's so important for them to be seen on the station. That's why you are my Space Queen of the Naruto Universe. 'Yea Baby' ^_^
person roro237
schedule October 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
WoW! I knew something big was coming but I didn't think Sasuke would be on the front line! This is going to get scary huh?! I like how you always give us a taste of old with your touches on it:) Tonton I like:) This was out of this world as usual oh great Space Queen of Naruto Universe ^_^
schedule October 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 25: Sasuke grows a set.

Awesomeness.
schedule October 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
woah, risky much.