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by mannahpierce

schedule July 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Ok, I admit that I got stuck on the 'Moegi-san' chapter. You know, (as far as I know) in Japanese you generally can't refer to a girl with -kun. They just don't do that. You can only say that way to boys... I ignored that because it wasn't important but now it looks like it is after all... But on the other hand it's AU so you can have your own rules for using suffixes.

I liked that Shika misses Naruto. I practically cried with him when he hugged Haru telling him that 'it IS always like that...'

And I must say I was kind of glad that Hikaru was the one paralyzed on that ladder...

Maybe now that Kiba is up and about sasuke will be able to concentrate on looking for Orochimaru...
I hope naruto will be ok....
person cynaga
schedule July 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
[ch. 99] I want to be Uchiha. *whine*

Thank you for all your hard work, Mannah-sama!
person angelj232000
schedule July 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I was happy to see Kisame & Itachi thank Kiba. I hope Kiba can look into Haru soon, I think he needs some reassurance even though he was mostly responsible for the void incident. I was very happy to have 2 updates this week thanks so much. Keep up the good work but don't stress your self out. <3 HUGS!!!!!
person roro237
schedule July 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I didn't realize that Kiba did so much! I mean he's like a mom noticing stain that should have came out in the wash. Who smells clean enough and then the first place he has to clean is the bathroom. It's a typical mom move:) I'm so glad he's back! I think Sasuke had done wonderfully but there are Ten kids goodness gracious anyone would need help:) All those personality to deal with and some of the crew not really wanting to help with the children. Yes thank goodness Kiba is back! I'm feeling sorry for Hana and her 'family'. The title speaks volumes of Kiba-san he's guardian to more than just the children. No wonder Kakashi was thinking those thoughts on who is most important to keep and Kiba was it. I'm still pisses at Kakashi about that! I know he's the ass that's in every family:) Queeny I loved this chapter! I love you to! Spoiling us once again with two chapters! ~Bowing~ Thank you for all your hard work ^_^
schedule July 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Kiba's back!!!!

SQUEEEEEEEEE!!!!

Haku's next, yes? Please?
person Aflyingmonkey123
schedule July 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I hope Kiba can talk to biwako-san soon!
Haru needs to know that everything is not always his fault.
person telynaayuri
schedule July 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
sheesh kiba's job is hard and i think haru is going to get caught doing something bad ... again. he seems to push things.
person Dorkchic
schedule July 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Sometimes it just takes a set of fresh eyes to spot a problem because the other people have been living so close to it that they cave become accustomed. I still feel horrible for Shika because not only is he not coping well, but the people who would normally spot it are having the same problems and are unable to help him. Maybe once Kiba is able to finally talk to Biwako and Haru he will be able to spot what has been happening and sick Sasuke on him. Because it is for sure that Shika is not going to go the Sasuke himself with this because of his feeling of guilt. I hope they will get better and sooner rather than later because seeing them (or rather reading them) like this is so incredibly sad.
person telynaayuri
schedule July 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
ok i had to review this time. the end of this chapter was so sad. although its nice that haru can talk to someone who understands his thought process. maybe shika can slowly, since haru is still a kid, talk to haru about things or maybe even his friend klenn. but please keep this story going there seems to be so many ideas that you have going on.
person lonelylulaby
schedule July 14, 2011 at 12:00 AM
That last little segment with Shika and Haru just got my tear ducts into overdrive. I dont want them to blame themselves, it's not really Shika's fault. He cant keep his mind open all the time, it will cause stress, and there was probably something traumatic goin on that made all the dots not connect. I hope he can forgive himself and that Naruto gets better for ALL their sakes. The family is not good when their core members are out of wack. Oh yea and I like the part where Iruka was like look at the bright side, and then proceeded to list all the new characteristics the kids had shown.

ja ne till next time and keep up the good work