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very cool, storys great so far love the 18+stuff, good description :D

The sex scene was just peachy in my opinion. While I love Kimi/Naru, I'm personally waiting for the Shika/Naru.

The sex was very hot last chapter... if I didn't say so last time. I got distracted by the resident genius and the evil Uchiha mastermind. :)

I love love love... uhg LOVE the idea of sweaty sexy Shikamaru nad i'm not one of those girls who likes the whole sweaty guy thing. Naruto is a TEASE all hair strokey and sweet while getting Shika to bandage him up after rough sex with someone else. *sighs*

I like the story so far. Keep it up! :) As far as the sex scene, I would rather you wrote the Shika Itachi one :) Naruto doing what he did seamed kinda wrong.. Actually I was very surprised when I read that Nearuto refused to have sex with Kimi for so long. It always seemed for me that sexual tension was all they had together. The way they got together was purely physical deal. So I was thinking that they f*cked like bunnies, but otherwise could not connect. So I was kinda surprised.

It's not that I didn't like the scene, I didn't like the players. Sorry, but just my opinion.

About the lack of comments on the sex scene... I don't know about everyone else... but it's not that I didn't like it. It's just that I was hoping it wouldn't happen because I wanted him to come to his senses before then. Hearing all of Shika's thoughts and feelings made it hard to read in detail about Naruto being oblivious with someone else because I knew that would hurt Shika. It's actually easier to think of Shika with Itachi because they both know about his feelings and it won't turn into something else and might even comfort Shika who knows.

HOT!! Wow... very pretty... very smexy... very very nice! :) Heehee Naughty Itachi!

At first I was all "No, Naruto don't do it!", but the way you wrote it works well. Their relationship sort of progresses so there is more build up and angst (which I will never say no to) and he was up front about his reasons for sleeping with Kimi (hell, he basically flat out said that he was using him). This also puts him and Shika on closer to equal footing with both of them being physically involved with someone. It manages to give Naruto something to grind his teeth over (when he finds out) while having absolutly no excuse to do anything about it.

Itachi (a.k.a. you) is a genius- it is a predicament almost entirely of Naruto's own making and he will be forced to do some self examination and make some hard choices concerning his life if he wants things to get better. With some steamy porn along the way! If I were Naruto and knew that my hot roommate was just in the next room being molested by the walking embodiment of sex I don't know if I would be able to not peek. The temptation to misuse that kind of access would be just terrible.

In sort of related news- have you been reading Freeze Burn Tokyo by Leilita? Absolute Shika hotness - you two need to get together and see of you can give all of us readers one big massive yaoigasm! lol

oh i new it!!! i new it! i new it! i new it! i had a feeling man! i had a feeling that SOMETHING just SOMETHING was gonna go down with itachi and shika! and i was right!!!!!! lol plz excuse my excitment, i just had a HUGE feelin tht somethign was gonna happen btween them. ok m=now u most def have 2 update cuz i SOOOOOO wanna read that hotness thats gonna come up in the next chappy........... there is gonna b some itachi/shikamaru in the next chapter right????? i hope soo!!!!!!

no naru don't !! you are making stupid thing it's not the good guy. love this story !!