rate_review Reviews

Please write more. This is great.

Well, first of all, thank you for your proper warnings (lots of lemon writers happen to "forget" about it..), but nonetheless I had to skip that 2nd chapter which I'm really sad about, after reading the third. It was very well written from the start (I barely noticed the flaws in your grammar, mostly because my english sucks in that matter :D, so it doesn't bothered me.) and I have to say, that was the best Anal scene what I've ever read in a lemon. Perfectly detailed, well-formulated, HOT, long, etc.etc. I enjoyed it~ a LOT.

So I gave you a 5* and I really hope you'll continue it. Maybe in time, adding some other chars too (I know it's mostly about Hinata & Naruto, but who knows what you having in store.:)
So keep it up~!

Wowowowow. That was a really good chapter. I mean, this is one of the best lemons I've ever read. Kudos to you!

I did notice something that was off, however. During sex, if a female is truly aroused, it's impossible to pee during release. due to all the blood in the area, it the urethra is closed off completely, similar to how the urethra in the penis is closed off with a hard-on. Just thought I'd let'cha know.

-Dipweed

Good story. I really like the characters and how the story progresses, but the grammar did make it a bit hard to read. I'd be willing to help you out with that if you want.

it was good, but I think it could've been better. The third chapter could have been improved by having it be naruko doing the sucking off, for example.

Hope to see an update soon!
~Leonineus