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November 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Sorry about the confussion. Longer chapters please? It goes by to quickly! :) I am enjoying this story and will be looking for more. I think your lemon was great!
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November 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Yay! Another chapter! :D Poor Kotetsu's already in a mess. Of course, as a reader and fangirl of putting favorite characters through all sorts of hell, I don't consider this a bad thing. And Genma's a bit slimy, isn't he? *lol*
Oops! Didn't mean for you to have to look NaNo up. I've been doing it for so long that I tend to forget there's people that don't know what it is. ^^;
Also, might I offer a bit of technical advice? While I am enjoying the story thus far, the way it's structured is a bit... squashed. It can get difficult to read in the longer clumps of conversation, especially. A good rule of thumb in regards to dialogue: each time a different/new person speaks, start a new paragraph. Make sure to keep anything referring to the speaker with the words they spoke, too. It'll also make your chapters take on a longer appearance. ;)
Oops! Didn't mean for you to have to look NaNo up. I've been doing it for so long that I tend to forget there's people that don't know what it is. ^^;
Also, might I offer a bit of technical advice? While I am enjoying the story thus far, the way it's structured is a bit... squashed. It can get difficult to read in the longer clumps of conversation, especially. A good rule of thumb in regards to dialogue: each time a different/new person speaks, start a new paragraph. Make sure to keep anything referring to the speaker with the words they spoke, too. It'll also make your chapters take on a longer appearance. ;)
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November 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I especially love stories where characters reveal hidden feelings for each other, and Izumo & Kotetsu stories are too rare anyway. I look forward to more !
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November 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Good story. I like a good Kotetsu story. Keep up the good work.
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November 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I... I think I love you. Kotetsu... just the way I like him. *lol* I've hoped to see something like this nommable little teaser of a start for ages now (so much so that I gave in and started my own for this year's NaNo). Eagerly awaiting more. XD
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November 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Haha, you totally got me there. I wasn't expecting that switch. I can't wait to read more, but please make them longer! Thanks!