rate_review Reviews

omg. this chapter was SUPER well written. I love the pacing and really /felt/ Sasuke's panic and anguish.
Well done!!!

Part 2, addressing the statement "Sasuke’s eyes widened as large as was possible considering his Asian heritage":

I know your **intent** was good but if some people are feeling hurt or offended, then a closer look at what **impact** your words are having might be necessary. I know this is your story and you can write it however you please but I also think that tuning into what your readers have to say when they have legitimate concerns is prudent.

I did raise my eyebrows when I first read the chapter containing Sasuke's eyes sentence but I didn't say anything in my review. Jen's recent review basically laid it all down, especially in her last two points i.e. 1) saying "Asian" collapses difference among all the diverse people on the Asian continent (i.e. Indians, Chinese, Cambodians, Afghanis, etc) to just one look and 2) just because someone is has "Asian heritage" doesn't mean they're going to have "narrow" eyes.

My tone isn't antagonistic in this review. I just want to continue the dialogue because I think how people are represented in stories is an important issue.

Amazing chappi, you really could tell how difficult was all thsi for Sasuke. I wonder whats gonna do Naruto know with a broken Sasuke in his arms?

Thanks for the update.

I love this story and can hardly wait between each chapter. I actually arrived late at work because of you! Okay, well, because of MY craving for YOUR writing, but... And now you're giving me the evil cliffie? (I tend to take things a bit personally, or so I've been told)
Seriously, though, I would love to get inside Naruto's head some time?
Keep up and feed my addiction! Pretty please?

Hi. :) Your story is Amazing with a capital A. And I have read many a lot tons a huge gigantic enormous amount of stories on aff.net so I would know what's amazing. It may seem like I'm only trying to entice you to update again possibly soon very soon which is just a tiny little itty bit true but your story really is really beautiful so please update asap ok? :) Or else I'll have to bug you and review every week like I do for just dreaming who wrote Independence which you really have to read if you didn't. So please update your awesome addicting enticing beautifully written story ok? :) and read Independence in the original section. :)
<3 betrayed

Thank god I have found your story. At first I wasn't going to read it because of all the terrible stories out their by authors that don't have any understanding of the BDSM culture and don't bother to research, but I am so glad I risked it.

Sasuke is right, Naruto should have been there to administer the butt plug, cock ring and nipple clamps himself, or at least be there in person for support, so I'm curious to see the whole meaning behind the Dom's actions, because leaving a sub on his own for the first time when he's purposely trying to overload his sub is almost cruel. My guess is Naruto wanted to break Sasuke down just enough to prove to him that he would always be there to catch him. Don't take me wrong, I'm not critizing you, it's just my thoughts.

Again, I have to praise you, this story is phenomenal. I look forward to all future updates, though the rapidly increased heartbeat, and barely contained squeal of joy when I see an update is a bit disconcerting.

~Jay

Please Ma'am, my I have some more? I love this story.

Amazingly hot! I believe you captured how hard it is to let go and have someone else take control of the situation very well. Yet, usually the outcome is mind-blowing. So in turn I can't wait for your next update.

Oh was completely there with him! Poor Sasuke. Its one thing to ready yourself on your own steam to please a Top but to the extent of overload not knowing when they'd be there to catch your fall into that headspace... outch. I was moments away from crying with him! I really really hope Naruto is prepaired for that fall out and knows exactly how to handle this. First time down... ugh heart wrenching!!

*blushyness* Your welcome, my feedback is rarely thought about but just whatever the chapter inspired.

I really like this story. Naruto/Sasuke fanfiction is like my secret love that no one knows about.:) They are the only male/male couple i read about in fanfiction that i can actually envision together. I love them. While I, myself, do not practice or participate in a Dom/Sub relationship, I have read a quite a few stories using this lifestyle as the base. I have to say your story is probably one of the best to come out. Your story is more the just words on the page, it seems to really jump out at you and gives a whole nother story that goes on between the words. Sry if that doesnt make sense I cant really describe it. Just know that I love this story, and Im really looking forward to reading more and watching the story progress to the end. Keep up the great work. I cant wait to read more. Your New Fan, LadyAnocsona