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March 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Well i just send a review, but as i was reading the rest of your reviews i realised you wont be posting to Adultfanfiction anymore. While that really sucks that i wont be able to finish this story, I can understand the reason for not posting on this site. I dont know what YGal, or what ever its called, is or how to go about finding it, so i guess this chapter will be the last i get to read. I wish u the best of luck on your other site.
LadyAnocsona
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March 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
omg, love where the story is going, thanks for updating so fast! Can't wait to see what happens next, i'm curious to know if naruto still takes him out or if the point of the whole thing was to get him to break down and open up to what hes really feeling.
Love naruto as a Dom/Top. Too many stories leave Sasuke in charge and i'm like, i want it the other way! lol!
Keep up the good work!
Love naruto as a Dom/Top. Too many stories leave Sasuke in charge and i'm like, i want it the other way! lol!
Keep up the good work!
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March 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely adore this story!!! there are no words to describe it. I dont see Naruto as being abusive. This is a BDSM story and this is the scene that this plot plays into and you have oulined it very well. Whether people know it or not we all tend to fall into roles when we are in relationships. Sasuke Needed to have all of his concieved walls that he has built around himself broken down so that they can build them back up together. I was floored when he opened that box and found all of those goodies. Now thats a care package. Sometimes you just want the the decisions taken away from you so you can just enjoy the moment but it all bout trusting the partner that you have have. Sasuke trusts Naruto otherwise he never would have agreed to this.
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March 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
oh you tease, update soon? love it :)
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March 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Actually, I agreed with the previous poster's comments on the racist implications of your line: "Sasuke’s eyes widened as large as was possible considering his Asian heritage" and said nothing because everything that needed to be said was already said by someone else, and probably better than I could have said it. Given your comments at the end of this chapter, I now regret not saying anything about it. Let me add in my own two cents:
1. Would you have written: "Sasuke’s eyes widened as large as was possible considering his CAUCASIAN heritage"? If the line is an innocent as you claim, then we should all understand it perfectly well if you substitute in a different race, ne?
2. Don't get cute about the fact that you didn't write "his eyes were like all Asian eyes." It is a fact of English grammar that unless you use qualifiers (some, many, a few, etc.) the implication is always a universal "ALL." The reader can't possibly know you meant "some" (versus "many," a "few," etc.) unless you state "some."
3. What, exactly, do you mean by "Asian heritage"? What, exactly, do you mean by "Asian descended people’s eye shape has nothing to do with them being Asian"? So then the eye shape is similar among Asian populations, is that right? So Chinese eyes look like Indian eyes, which are similar to what you would find on people from Afghanistan, Armenia, Iran, Jordan, Korea, Turkey, Vietnam... All of those people are Asian, so what, exactly, are the "Asian descended people" that we talking about here? (Again, without qualifiers, without specifying "East Asian," "Japanese," etc., you verbally lump all Asian people into one category.)
4. NEITHER all Asian people NOR all East Asian people have small eyes! (And yes, I, too am talking about "the visible shape of the eye including the lids and shape of skin and muscle outside it and not the eye ball alone." Let me repeat: not all East Asians have small eyes!)
I am sorry for you that you would write off someone's legitimate concerns about stereotyping as nothing more than "grandstanding" rather than giving the issue some thought. And I am also sorry, but I no longer feel comfortable continuing to read your fanfictions.
1. Would you have written: "Sasuke’s eyes widened as large as was possible considering his CAUCASIAN heritage"? If the line is an innocent as you claim, then we should all understand it perfectly well if you substitute in a different race, ne?
2. Don't get cute about the fact that you didn't write "his eyes were like all Asian eyes." It is a fact of English grammar that unless you use qualifiers (some, many, a few, etc.) the implication is always a universal "ALL." The reader can't possibly know you meant "some" (versus "many," a "few," etc.) unless you state "some."
3. What, exactly, do you mean by "Asian heritage"? What, exactly, do you mean by "Asian descended people’s eye shape has nothing to do with them being Asian"? So then the eye shape is similar among Asian populations, is that right? So Chinese eyes look like Indian eyes, which are similar to what you would find on people from Afghanistan, Armenia, Iran, Jordan, Korea, Turkey, Vietnam... All of those people are Asian, so what, exactly, are the "Asian descended people" that we talking about here? (Again, without qualifiers, without specifying "East Asian," "Japanese," etc., you verbally lump all Asian people into one category.)
4. NEITHER all Asian people NOR all East Asian people have small eyes! (And yes, I, too am talking about "the visible shape of the eye including the lids and shape of skin and muscle outside it and not the eye ball alone." Let me repeat: not all East Asians have small eyes!)
I am sorry for you that you would write off someone's legitimate concerns about stereotyping as nothing more than "grandstanding" rather than giving the issue some thought. And I am also sorry, but I no longer feel comfortable continuing to read your fanfictions.
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March 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
oh such a mean cliffhanger...WHY lol
Just wanted to let you know how much I love this story. There has clearly been some research put into it, which is something I always appreciate in a story. I'm sorry to hear that you've been having problems and I hope that this will stop soon! I'm also glad that you are going to continue to update these stories as they are so good! :)
Just wanted to let you know how much I love this story. There has clearly been some research put into it, which is something I always appreciate in a story. I'm sorry to hear that you've been having problems and I hope that this will stop soon! I'm also glad that you are going to continue to update these stories as they are so good! :)
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March 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This last chapter was so magnificent. It was so intriguing to read Sasuke falling apart in his acceptance of what he really wanted and when he finally fell into Naruto's arms I was very touched. I can't wait to read more. <3
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March 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I am leaning toward your phrasing being a bit racist and stereotypical, actually. I know you didn't intend it to be, but I think you should really think about it, instead of flying off the handle and raging at someone for pointing it out...especially considering the terrible things I saw people saying in your journal comments on y!gallery, and the way you were accusing the reviewer of being a grandstanding know-it-all. It is a valid thing to point out, and they did it in a polite way, I thought.
Look at it this way - would it sound racist if it was: "He narrowed his lips as much as possible, considering his African heritage." I mean, the writer might think full lips are sexy, but that doesn't make the phrase okay.
Look at it this way - would it sound racist if it was: "He narrowed his lips as much as possible, considering his African heritage." I mean, the writer might think full lips are sexy, but that doesn't make the phrase okay.
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March 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
"Sasuke’s eyes widened as large as was possible considering his Asian heritage."
I was taken aback to read a line that referenced the "Asian squinty eye" stereotype in your story as though it is fact. It is certainly not fact that all Asian people (as this line implies) have small (squinty) eyes. The Asian squint eye stereotype is one that originated in/was perpetuated by racist Hollywood in order to negatively characterize all Asians as ignorant, docile, etc. For some general information on Asian stereotypes (including this one), please refer to wikipedia:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stereotypes_of_East_Asians_in_the_Western_world
Also check out the negative user responses on yahoo questions when someone asked "Why do asians have small squinty eyes?":
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20090411193947AAnQ0i8
The difference between Asian and non-Asian eyes is in the upper eye fold, not in the size or shape of the eye (or the facial muscles around the eye which cause it to open and close). You may see for yourself an example of an attractive, large eyed Asian woman in this contact lens advertisement:
http://community.livejournal.com/garagesalejapan/16907170.html
I do not wish you to think that I have said all this because I believe you to be racist or even harboring racist thoughts. I do not. What I do think, however, is that all of us unconsciously, and unintentionally, absorb negative stereotypes (racist, classist, sexist, etc.) that society and the media puts out. Sometimes we need to have these stereotypes pointed out in order to realize how pervasive they are and to stop believing in them. (I myself had to be reminded to stop saying the word "retarded.") Therefore, I STRONGLY urge you to change the line. Do not be a party to perpetuating stereotypes.
I was taken aback to read a line that referenced the "Asian squinty eye" stereotype in your story as though it is fact. It is certainly not fact that all Asian people (as this line implies) have small (squinty) eyes. The Asian squint eye stereotype is one that originated in/was perpetuated by racist Hollywood in order to negatively characterize all Asians as ignorant, docile, etc. For some general information on Asian stereotypes (including this one), please refer to wikipedia:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stereotypes_of_East_Asians_in_the_Western_world
Also check out the negative user responses on yahoo questions when someone asked "Why do asians have small squinty eyes?":
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20090411193947AAnQ0i8
The difference between Asian and non-Asian eyes is in the upper eye fold, not in the size or shape of the eye (or the facial muscles around the eye which cause it to open and close). You may see for yourself an example of an attractive, large eyed Asian woman in this contact lens advertisement:
http://community.livejournal.com/garagesalejapan/16907170.html
I do not wish you to think that I have said all this because I believe you to be racist or even harboring racist thoughts. I do not. What I do think, however, is that all of us unconsciously, and unintentionally, absorb negative stereotypes (racist, classist, sexist, etc.) that society and the media puts out. Sometimes we need to have these stereotypes pointed out in order to realize how pervasive they are and to stop believing in them. (I myself had to be reminded to stop saying the word "retarded.") Therefore, I STRONGLY urge you to change the line. Do not be a party to perpetuating stereotypes.
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March 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Iread this fic... and I hope you don't mind but I refed it on my page as a must read. I've also recomended it to a friend outside the Naru fandome as a good BDSM read :) THis really has become one of my favorites!! I had issues with the word uploade thing. So I just went to the text frame and copy/past out of m doc and find it much easier and less frustrating to deal with... don't know if that helps you any :)