rate_review Reviews

Please update soon! It's original!

I love reading your story......but have to admit....I have to skip the lemons.....as your mom....I am very aware its my daughters story....so ....ah ya....lol....I still like the illusion of thinking my daughter doesn't know such things so for my mental state....lol...I have to mentally block those situations....but I do read everything else.....I also LOVE your original character that is soooooo you my dear....its just Adorable how you look out for Naruto!! LOVE IT!!! heheh its CUTE!! I can so hear your voice when I read this.....its like you completely!!

I'm so disappointed in this story. It seemed like it would be so good, but it's honestly not. The worst part is that the bulk of the story seems like it's focused on Sayuri...or "Mary Sue". Seriously, take the Mary Sue test for your character. Nothing is worst than a Mary Sue. And then you switch tenses constantly. I'm not trying to flame, but your story is going in a really bad direction.

i wasn't sure about reading this story at first, but i'm definately glad i did. keep up the good work!

Sayuri's mothering her little brother Naruto I found to be very sweet and dear!! I like the thought of Naruto with an older sister to look out for him. I don't think I have ever read a fanfiction with him and a good older sister looking out for him....usually they are rough on him....so I loved the older guardian sister approach!!

I am so PROUD of you!! I would LOVE to see some of your own fanfiction art work up for this!! :) Hey..hehe... maybe you can post up that one cartoon you made for me of Naruto and Sasuke...its so CUTE!!! LOVE IT

You need a beta..badly. "Urethral glow?" someone peeing on him?

YOu're using big words out of context and you've got to watch for that.

ummm how are the three cheaters (and that's exactly what I'm callin them) going to take to the news Naruto is becoming closer with Kiba? I mean Sasuke and he share classes... Sasuke's gonna know and if he knows surely the other two will know.

Ok Great Story I hope an update is to come soon. And I hope Naruto doesnt get back together with Sasuke, a person only gets one chance after that forget it. (thats me though)

I'm really loving this! Poor Naruto! -hugs Naru-chan-

Hey, I've got an idea. How about Naruto leaves them, takes his mother's surname and becomes a singer about a year later? His demeanor should change, too. Make him cold, cruel, cynical, etc. That should be interesting.

By the way, I got so inspired by your story, I wanted to make a fanart for it. It nearly finished, so I'll PM you the link later. ^^

Hope you update soon! I really wanna read what happens next. xD