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September 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
You've done an excellent job of capturing the essence of heartbreak. I can really visualize the scene in the bar between the two of them.
One small technical note:
You've got a slightly odd construction here: She'd let her drag her out. Just a suggestion, but for clarity's sake, maybe She let herself be dragged out so there's no confusion over which is Sakura and which Ino.
I liked the reunion as well. It was very appropriate to their situation as you've described it. You did a wonderful job of capturing their hope in the end.
Thank you for sharing, and happy writing!